Ink-Stained Scribe

When Should You Ask for a Critique?

I would want my badass pegacorn to look like this,
I've been writing my whole life. Recently, Raven asked me to rewrite the first story I ever did, and I was forced to inform her of the terrible truth: I wrote my first story when I was three years old, and it involved a white pegacorn rescuing a cart-load of orphans from the Care Bears villain. Pretty sure I drew a coal-cart. (If I ever rewrite, I'm thinking Steampunk.)

Needless to say, my experience has been drawn out since the tender age of three-ish, and I've picked up a couple of things about asking for critiques along the way...mostly through doing it wrong. Now let's be clear that I'm still in the learning process myself, but from my experience (doin' it wrong) so far, there are two major mistakes new/amateur writers make when asking for critiques:

1. NOT asking for critiques.

Obviously, it's hard to improve, and even harder to publish if you never ask for critiques. There are plenty of people who are shy about their work, and I totally understand that. You're making yourself very vulnerable by sharing something that you've created, and we as humans do our very best to avoid being vulnerable. Realizing that you are not ready for criticism puts you a step ahead...unless you never ask at all. Assuming that most people are writing with the intent to publish, the worst way to hinder yourself is never to let anyone see what you've written.

2. Asking for critiques too early.

I'm going to focus on this second mistake, because it's the one I've made time and again. I've never been shy about sharing my work, which has its own set of problems. Most writing problems are like sliding glass doors, and most writers are like cats perched on the back of the couch, rump wriggling. Until we sail head-first into that sliding door, we don't realize it's there, even if other people have pointed it out.

CLANG.

This was my process in learning to ask for critiques. When was I ready? Let's find out:



"I have a few chapters and I want to see if my idea is good enough to pursue."

-Not yet.

A. This isn't so much a question, as a neon sign saying: "VALIDATE ME"

If you're still at the beginning of your novel, it can be really tempting to seek validation, but you've got to be prepared for the possibility of a negative reaction. What happens if your beta-reader tells you your premise or characters are cliche? Will you stop writing?

  • If you answered "yes", you're definitely not ready. The truth is, MOST first drafts read as cliched or hard to understand. A lot of writers don't really start understanding their own stories until at least half way through, and it's only in revision that the first three chapters reflect the real meat of the story.
  • If you answered "no", why are you asking whether it's good enough to write if you're going to write it anyway? You don't need someone to tell you it's good. Trust your own passion for your work.


B. No one else can know what you have in your head.


How many books have you read that start the same way? Boy gets magic object. Evil somethingorother shows up and destroys his village. Boy flees with mentor, only to realize that magic object is....

Right. So everyone probably has their own idea of what "..." stands for, but the important point is this: you know how your story is going to unfold, and what makes it unique. You can't expect a beta-reader to be able to tell from the first few chapters how epically mind-blowing is your premise, or how endearing is your main character. /Shakespeare


"I just wrote this scene, and it's so awesome, and I sent it to my entire writing group! I just need to share it with someone so we can talk about how awesome it is!"

WHO LET THE FANGIRLS OUT?
-Not yet.

I'm still sometimes guilty of this, and there are a few reasons I discovered that made this a particularly bad time to ask for a critique.

A. I don't actually want criticism yet.

When I want to fangirl over something I've written, I'm not looking for someone to tell me that the character cries too much. I'm just looking for someone to squee with me. Maybe it's okay to send this to a really positive, fangirly supporter...but see the next point for why it's still not a good idea.

B. I can't concentrate on anything else but hearing back from my critique partners.

All the excitement and energy I've worked up by writing something I think is awesome turns to despair when no one has time to read or reply, and I stop writing until I get the validation I want. My suggestion? Turn that excitement into steam to write your next chapter. :)

"I'm not done with my book/story."

-Probably not yet.

I say "probably" here for a couple of reasons. Let's start with why you SHOULDN'T ask for someone to read an unfinished work, and then cite the exceptions.

A. You might not finish.

Did I just realize your nightmare? Fact is, your beta-readers will not thank you for sending them 30,000 words of a novel to read and critique, and then find that you've abandoned that story for something shinier, rendering their efforts pointless. Good beta readers are valuable, and you have to respect their time.

B. You'll probably have a lot of things you want to change by the time you get to the end.

I'll shoot out another anecdote here, because I'm guiltier of this than anyone else I know. I learn something with every novel, and I had to learn this advice in two stages.

With THE MARK OF FLIGHT, I started sending out one chapter at a time in 2003. I finished the novel in 2005, and sent it out again with revisions. Taking the suggestion of an agent, I cut out 50,000 words and sent it again. Then, in 2009, I rewrote 90% of it...and sent it out again. Now that I finally have a decent book, I've chopped off the beginning, and have planned out a set of six new scenes for the new opening. Guess what I'm going to do when I finish. Shocked my beta-readers haven't killed me yet? So am I.

With HELLHOUND, I wrote about 60,000 words in November, at which point I slapped the whole thing up on Google Docs and kept writing. After reaching the 106,000 word total, I had dropped a character, figured out my heroine's true "starting point" and come to realize that I was utterly embarrassed by the first 40,000 words or so, and wished no one else had read it.


The exceptions.
-You're a new writer, and you need a cheerleader. This is totally understandable, because most of us aren't confident when we do something for the first time, and those of us who are probably shouldn't be. The important part is to inform your reader that you are NOT looking for criticism, but the encouragement you need to finish the story.

-You're having plot trouble. It happens to all of us. Sometimes getting a fresh perspective, or even just talking out a problem at someone will help us to figure out where we went wrong and what we can do to get ourselves back on track. Often, this might be resolved by talking to another writer, but sometimes the problem is more elusive than that. I'm lucky enough to have a few really good beta readers.

-You're collaborating. Last week I wrote an entry about collaboration, and this is one situation in which I think it's absolutely essential to get critiques. You and your partner need to be on the same page (ha ha), and that means reading what the other person has written, and talking about where your visions diverged, or how a cool new idea might change the path of the plot in the future.


"I just finished my book!"
Shock! Amazement!

It might be ready.

Finishing a book is a huge accomplishment, but had I not already posted the first 50,000 words of HELLHOUND in Google Docs, I wouldn't have sent it out right away. Like I said before, you'll probably know a couple of things you want to change. If not, you'll probably spot them once the manuscript cools. It may not bother you to stare at your mistakes and know your beta readers will nail you for them, but it bothers me, because I'm lucky enough to have beta readers who won't be nice just because I know where they live.

I think it's all right to send it out at this stage, just know that you'll probably get critiques on things that you've already decided to change, and if you consistently tell your beta readers "I know, I'm doing *this* instead", they may feel less than necessary to your process, and a little resentful that they'll have to read it all again. (Sorry, Raven.)


I recommend you give your book a couple of weeks to marinate in its own awesome (or suck, if that's the case) before you pull it out and give it a good look. Make notes of what you'd like to change, and if you're not ready to revise, give your beta-readers these notes along with the manuscript.

To be clear, I haven't actually managed to do this myself, but I hope to take away the lessons I've learned this time around and work toward that goal.

"I finished my book/story, and I've let the manuscript cool. I'm okay with the thought of changing it."

Oh look, someone opened the sliding-glass door!

When do you ask for critiques? Have you ever asked for a critique too early? How do you know when you're ready? Answer in the comments!


photo by Basial

Beating the Loss of NaNoWriMomentum

Cross-posted from Double Shot of Lauren

We writers seem to be forever forcing ourselves to the page. Actually, I think it's more a matter of forcing the page to bend to our will and coming up bruised, bloodied, and over-caffinated. Not to mention, having only an unsatisfying draft full of stubborn sentences, dripping with adverbs, to show for it. Last week, I posted about how pressure and accountability help me write. What I failed to mention in is that the output of forcing myself to write is not always my best work. It's often horrible.



But that's okay.

The beauty of writing is that we always have the power to erase and pretend like that awful scene where the two MCs end up in a cave, soaking wet, and have to dry their clothes by the fire never happened. Our inner perfectionists may cringe, our inner hipster may scream that the method is inauthentic. You know what? They can get a room. They can have lots of OCD, skinny-jeans-wearing babies who complain about authenticity (or lack thereof) and never get as far as submitting. Like sketches and mock-ups, a first draft is a place to make mistakes. Stories don't spill from our pens in well-edited prose, pre-sifted for all those little golden nuggets of perfect, poignant detail.

And if yours does, get the hell out of my webspace.

The point is, I need to write those bad scenes, because I need something to get me to the good ones. You know how NBC used to air "Friends" and then some other show, and then "Seinfeld"? Those awful scenes are my "some other show" between the good ones--the scenes that are going to need a lot more attention and work before they're able to stand on their own. The scenes that might just never work at all.

But it's hard to get through something when you know it sucks more than Mega Maid.

Momentum

You might notice another post I linked in a later entry, where an author on the Writer on Fire blog discussed writing without inspiration. His post was a well-written and succinct explanation of the practices necessary to keep ourselves going during inspiration's bleak winter season. There was a point, however, where I thought a little expansion would have been helpful, and that was where he spoke about "Momentum".


"While inspiration is strong, the experienced writer gets to work creating outline or summary. Once you have all of the main points down on 'paper' you can complete the work whether you're inspired or not."

As any first-year physics student knows, momentum is mass*velocity. In writing terms, that roughly equates to idea*wordcount. Basically, it's our ability to get words on the page at a certain rate. Sometimes, we've got to push to get a scene started, but that push gives us the start we need to carry on until the scene catches, and we're golden. Sometimes that's because it's a day of inspiration and creative clarity. Other days, it's sheer momentum. Those days when creative clarity and writing momentum work in tandem are the double-rainbow of writing, as glorious as they are rare. Those are the 7,000-word days, the days when writing makes me forget to eat or sleep.

But building momentum is something that I think must be learned for someone to be successful as a writer. It's why a lot of authors have daily word-count goals. Sometimes, it's the starting that's hard. It's slogging through a desert, heading for that next little oasis of a plot-point shimmering in the distance. I tend to hit my stride somewhere between 300 and 500 words, before the scene takes hold.

NaNoWriMomentum

NaNoWriMo offers the pressure necessary to get to the 50,000 word goal. One thing I've noticed, however, is that a lot of people get to the 50,000 word goal and lose momentum almost immediately after that goal is reached. The pressure, competition, and companionship of NaNoWriMo are invigorating, because you can see the thousands of people racing through the sands along with you, and they make it fun. They make it fierce. They egg you on.

Then, on December 1st, they all disappear.

Some of them have accomplished what they set out to do--finished their own personal races. If you, however, are one of those people who is 50,000ish words through a more-than-likely-130,000-word manuscript, that desert can get to looking pretty lonely and intimidating. Fast.

Especially when the 50,000 word-point tends to be where plotting gets tricky, where you have to start juggling geese and playing with fire while singing the alphabet backwards to get everything to that shining ending (which you may not even have planned yet).

It was like that for me. I'd spent November in a topsy-turvy writing state, and as soon as December 1st hit, I closed my laptop and gave myself a well-deserved break. I watched Korean Dramas all week and didn't even open the word document. Which is fine. Everyone needs a break once in a while, to give their brains time to cool off. But then there were the holidays; time spent with family; then all the shopping, cleaning, and loosing all that weight after the holidays. Then a wedding...

It's was so easy to get distracted by the mirage of busyness, to knowingly let it trick me away from the page, once that NaNoWriMomentum was gone.

It's February 9th, and I'm one of the lucky ones. I didn't stop writing entirely. I'm at 80,000 words (I was at 60,000 by the end of NaNoWriMo). My speed has diminished to a sixth of what it was when I had that NaNoWriMomentum, but maybe that's okay too. I know the point of NaNoWriMo is to get as many words on the page as possible, even if they're not amazing. Even if they're tangential. Even if they suck.

So how do you get that momentum back?

I'm still coming to the page almost every day and getting words down. Not every day, and I don't always write a lot of words. Since the end of January, I've been doing it a lot better. I wrote over 55,000 words last week, and I hope to write at least 50,000 more this week.

How? I don't pretend to have the definitive answer to that, but I can at least tell you what I've done.

I've made sure that other people know what my goals are. If you don't keep your goals private, I believe the likelihood that you will reach them increases. Speaking your desires out loud brings results, whether it's because it helps you visualize them clearly, because it helps your inner competitor to know that people are watching (or at least aware of) your goals, or because you believe that if you ask, you shall receive.

Another good way to bring freshness to a work you're probably convinced is falling apart is to revise your outline. This is why I love the notecarding method Holly Lisle teaches on her blog, because it allows my outline flexibility. By the time I get to 70,000 words, I've usually figure out what the hell I'm writing about. I've usually planned some revisions for earlier parts of the story. I usually stare at my outline, thinking--this isn't going to work how I thought it would. With notecards, revising is easy. I needed to take out a perspective and make what I had a lot shorter. (The pace of the story doesn't lend itself to 120,000 words) So I took out a perspective and ended up combining most of the scenes with other ones to give me a tighter story focusing on my heroine. I also, suddenly, got some insight on the main character's love interest. He finally opened up to me, reticent as he is, and spilled his guts and rather sad--though isn't everybody's, from some angle--backstory.

The next important step for me was not to go back and revise yet. I know all the new info on Lover Boy is going to change the depth of his character, the meaning behind some of his actions, and how he feels about them. I need to go back and change the perspective of all the scenes that aren't from my heroine's POV. But I need to wait until the draft is finished. If I start going back now, I could get caught in the quicksand of the endless revise.

So there you have it. Advice, from someone who knows only what works for me.

1. Tell other people your goals, so they can hold you accountable.

2. Revise your outline to incorporate all the things you know, now that you know what you're writing about.

3. DO NOT start revising the beginning. Keep going forward. You can revise later, when you will probably have thought of several more things you'll need to change anyway.

This Week's Blog Roundup


I've been podcasting all morning, and before I dash off to hack at my weekend word-count (+3,000 words by midnight, or my manuscript will turn into a pumpkin), I wanted to share some of the blog posts from this week that I found interesting, timely, informative, and/or helpful. So, without any more babbling:

Industry News!

BitchFest - YA Author Scott Westerfield gives a summation of the Bitch Magazine editing faux pas, which has been a hot topic in the writing (especially YA) industry this week. If you don't know what I'm talking about, read this. If you like Scott, Maureen Johnson, Holly Black, etc., read this.

On the Craft

Finding the Question - Over on the Magical Words blog, AJ Hartley discusses the importance of finding "the question" that your genre-fiction book poses as a means of focusing your story. I found this VERY helpful.

'I do think that the novel as a form lends itself to thoughts and feelings which push beyond genre formula, and that where they grow organically out of story and character, they give an extra level of interest to the work. I would also say that most books have these questions in them already, even if the author has focused simply on plot, but that the book can be made better if the author can become more aware of the question or questions shimmering just under the surface.'

You Can Write Without Inspiration - Loved this post on Writer on Fire by David Arthur Smith. There comes a time in every story I've written when the "magic" left, and finishing was a matter of discipline. I think it's crucial for aspiring writers to learn the three M-words "Momentum, Methodology, and Motivation" that he cites as the backbone to writing when "the inspiration runs out".

Depth of Character - (Writer Unboxed blog) Can I just say how much I love Donald Maas? If you haven't read his book on writing, I suggest you do. He's a literary agent who gives writers the straight facts about craft from the perspective of an agent. The questions and tips in this post got me to thinking about my characters.

How to Avoid the Endless Revise - (at Jill Kemerer's blog) Technically, not this week (Jan 26th), but I was late to the party, so I included it anyway. Jill discusses the pitfalls of revisiting old projects, or continually revising them, and gives a really simple way to decide if it's worth it, followed by a four-step revision method and a revision sheet. *ahem* I needed this post. I printed out the revision sheet. I will flagellate myself with it daily.

The Good News? Writing Never Gets Easier - (on Word Play by KM Weiland) You know you want to read this post.

'A writing life without any challenges would hardly be worth the effort, now would it? Recognizing, and even appreciating, the fact that writing willalways be difficult, frees us from the doubt, and even guilt, of feeling we’ll never be good enough—because the truth is we won’t. We’ll never be perfect, but we can always be better. '

Part II of an interview with bestselling ghostwriter Roz Morris - on Victoria Mixon's blog. This is really interesting! Read the comments.

And that's it for this week! Now, to hack at those 3,000 words...