Ink-Stained Scribe

Why Flaws and Motivations Matter More

What's that? I can't hear you over my AWESOME!
Have you ever created a character so sublimely kickass you can't believe they somehow rocketed straight from your subconscious?

He's a white-haired elf who doesn't realize he's a half-demon, and comes back to save the undeserving village that ran him off, only to die a slow and painful death (with an epic death-speech that would make Mercutio weep in a fit of jealous awe) to teach us all a lesson in tolerance. Speaking of tolerance, he's gay! With a demon. Isn't he awesome?
No. He's not. Maybe the above description intrigues you, and that's not a bad thing. Most likely, you're rolling your eyes. How do I know? Because I haven't given you a reason to care. It isn't that there's anything wrong with being a soliloquizing half-elf-half-demon still fighting to protect the ones that would have him killed (and getting some action on the side), but as it stands he's boring.

Here's the deal: anyone can heap awesome skills and powers onto a character. Anyone can throw a sad back-story and a tragic ending at a character. Anyone can give their character a controversial trait. (May I add, here, that making a character gay is not a quirk, flaw, or free-pass on making your character unique?) I can't embolden, underline, italicize, and capitalize the following enough: NONE OF THIS MATTERS WITHOUT FLAWS OR MOTIVATION.

Stories aren't about how awesome a character is. It's about the problems--internal and external--those characters overcome, and why they overcome them. Sure, how they overcome those problems is an important aspect of the plot, but it's in the "why" that we readers find a reason to care.

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Writing Romance - What About MY Needs!?

Writing Podcasts seem to have a certain synchronicity for me--when I'm struggling with something in my own writing, I hear it discussed in a podcast soon thereafter. It's not even that I seek out the episodes so much as I work my way though them, and the episode I need just happens to be there. That's happened to me with all three of my favorite writing podcasts: The Dead Robots Society, I Should Be Writing, and Writing Excuses. That's what I hope my own podcast, Pendragon Variety, can do for other aspiring writers.

 The other day, I was listening to the Writing Excuses podcast, and heard something that seemed like common sense, but which I sometimes lose track of when writing romance between two characters. I'm not talking about romance novels (not that there's anything wrong with them). I'm talking about every romance you write, and what keeps it from feeling forced--what draws your characters to each other, by proxy drawing your readers to the relationship: knowing the needs the two characters satisfy for each other.

 In "The Mark of Flight", Shiro and Arianna were pretty simple to figure out. Shiro fills Arianna's need to be seen, appreciated, and loved for who she is and not because she's a princess. Arianna fills Shiro's need to be believed in, and his need to be valued as a person. Funny enough, they satisfy a very similar needs for each other, though they come from completely different backgrounds. Their romance was never really an issue for me, so when I started writing HELLHOUND, I imagined everything would fall perfectly into place.

 Not so. Part of this was my fault in writing without any idea who my characters were, what motivated them, or what they even wanted. But I feel like I should have figured it out by the end of the first draft. Something wasn't quite working--it was totally unbalanced. They went from 0 to 40...then back to 10...then to 80...and then piddled along to the end. It's not because they're not both likable, interesting, developed characters. It's not because there wasn't plenty of attraction on both sides.

I knew that Jaesung was a good influence on Helena...but I couldn't quite figure out what it was about HER that made him stick around. I'm sure you know what I'm talking about when I say that, sometimes, I don't think one protagonist quite has as much to offer as the other. "Because he loves her" might be valid, but sometimes I still want a little more.

What does Bella have to offer Edward (besides the feeling that he's a horrible monster for wanting to eat her all the time)?

What does Ron give to Hermione (besides at least three reasons to cry in every book)?

What is it about Clary that makes Jace willing to brave even the possibility of incest for her? (*squick*)

 Jaesung gives me that problem. When you're a 23-year-old grad student juggling lots of goslings, what's going to draw you to a girl whose most likely background is "drug mule in witness protection"? Okay. Her hot legs. At first. But when shit starts going down, there's got to be something more.

Helena tries to do everything herself. She truly believes she has something that only she can do, and that she's got to do it alone. Unfortunately, her character flaw is in her inability to look past the moment and see consequences. Because she's too afraid to think about a future she thinks is hopeless, she gets herself into a lot of trouble for making decisions that don't seem to have any foresight.

Jaesung, on the other hand, has effectively killed his ability to live in the moment by always thinking about the past, and trying to figure out how to avoid making the same mistakes as his father. He works hard at something at which he's rather mediocre to make sure he can support his mother and his future family, while relegating his passions into the "hobby" box. Of course, he enjoys them...but he's not the type of person who can let himself disappoint people.

Helena never thinks about the future. Jaesung always does. This causes tension in their relationship, to be sure, but it also gives each of them something to contribute to the other. In a way, their flaws when it comes to life in general become their strengths for each other. Helena's lack of foresight gives Jaesung the opportunity to help her find her "light at the end of the tunnel" (Oh hai, theme). Her recklessness forces him to admit what he truly cares about, whether that lets people down or not.

Because I think flaws are so important, I have to make sure they grow, but don't fix each other, because the story isn't about overcoming flaws. Like many good stories, it's about overcoming adversity despite a thousand things that are in the way, including those flaws. Helena will probably never be able to plan ahead the way Jaesung does, and I know he will always feel duty-bound to take care of everyone around him.

She'll drag him out to play in the snow at 4AM. He'll remember anniversaries. She'll remind him to take a break from doing taxes. He'll make sure they get done later. She'll hunt demons for the safety of the world. He'll make sure she doesn't do it alone.

Yeah. They're a good match.

NaNoWriMo Outlining Workshop - Part I : The Groundwork



Character – Motivation- Conflict

This workshop is intended for those who already have a pretty good idea of their story, characters, and at least a vague notion of where they want their story to go. Feel free to be like "It's Magic, I ain't gotta explain shit!" at this point. That's stuff for later. If you've got a rough sketch of a scene here, a plot twist there, this is definitely going to help. Sit tight. But before you sit tight, make a pot of coffee and grab a notebook, a pack of notecards, and a pen. We're going to be doing this old-school.

This section focuses on the most important part of story: characters. It's aimed at organizing your characters on paper--their descriptions, desires, and disagreements--before you start writing your outline. You may find subplots, new twists, and new scenes springing to mind as you work through this section. Take note of them--you'll use that in part II of the workshop.

Note: Wow, y'all! I've had several thousand views on this post, so thank you! If you're enjoying this, or if it's not working for you, or if you have stuff to add, I'd love to hear from you in the comments. :)


I. CHARACTER


Write your characters’ names on separate notecards, or spread out on notebook paper—you’ll be writing quite a bit under each character’s name.

1.      Write a description of each major character (including your antagonist[1] or antagonistic force) that includes:

DECRIPTOR + NOUN

Descriptor - an adjective or adjectival phrase such as magic-weilding, willful, out-of-work.
Noun that helps you define your character, such as mercenary, werewolf, teenager.

Examples:
A. headstrong princess
B. stuttering slave
C. itinerant mage
D. charismatic general

*It is also acceptable to write NOUN who DESCRIPTIVE ACTION


Example: A girl who recently lost her job / a boy who survived the killing curse / a girl who hates her fairy-godmother.


2.      Once you have that list, try to add another descriptor you’d like the readers to discover about the character as they go through the book. You may not know this yet, and if not, you’ll probably figure it out while you’re writing. I call these “Shadow Descriptions”
Examples:
A. compassionate
B. brave
C. lonely
D. manipulative

So, throughout the story the reader will learn that the “headstrong princess” is also compassionate, the “stuttering slave” is also brave, the “itinerant mage” is also lonely, and the “charismatic general is manipulative. These traits don’t have to be surprising, but are how you might describe your characters’ personalities. These are the things you want to show your reader through your characters’ actions.

II. MOTIVATION

1.      Primary Desires
Write down what each character wants at the start of the story. Pick the most important motivation—the one thing they’re most concerned about. Try to make this more specific than “to be happy” or “to survive”. If you find yourself being too general, ask yourself questions. What would make them happy? What are they trying to survive, or is there something they are trying to survive for?

Examples:
A. To be a great queen.
B. To be in control of his own life.
C. To find the master that left him behind
D. To run a combined (and therefore peaceful) Rizellen and Centoren—his way.
Remember to note what their desires are at the BEGINNING of the story. These are usually the motivations we see right out in the open, the very first time we meet that character. You may find that your feelings about these goals change as you write, or even throughout the workshop. That’s fine!

2.      Secondary Desires
No one wants just one thing. In fact, people often want two different things that don’t go together, or that create some kind of internal conflict. Below your characters’ primary desires, write at least one more thing that character wants. I recommend you have two or three secondary desires for each character.

Examples:
A. To be seen and loved for who she is / to get home / to stop the war
B. To remain under the radar (and therefore safe) / to protect the people he cares about
C. To learn and teach magic by writing his book / to prevent war / NOT to be the only one trying to fix Rizellen’s problems
D. To be respected and revered for ending the war (by either conquering or combining) / to use the kidnapped princess as a means to get (primary desire) / to destabilize Rizellen

If your characters’ own desires conflict with one another, that’s a great source of tension, which gives you plenty of internal conflict.

            Example:
            Stuttering (but brave) slave boy wants to stay safely under the radar, but can’t because he also wants to protect those he cares about.


III. CONFLICT 

Write down next to each primary desire at least two things preventing the character from getting what he wants in the beginning chapters of your story. At least one of these should be related to your antagonist’s goals. If it’s not, you probably need to do some thinking on what makes those characters your protagonists and antagonists, and see if you can nudge them into more direct opposition.

Example:
The headstrong and compassionate princess wants to be a great queen. The things getting in her way are:

1. The council wants her cousin to be queen
2. She’s been kidnapped and can’t get home
3. She has no confidence in herself
4. She doesn’t know what her people need

The antagonist’s primary goal is to rule both of their countries, which conflicts with her goal of someday being a great queen. Further, the antagonist plans to use her against her kingdom, which also conflicts with her desire to be a great queen, as does his desire to destabilize her kingdom.

Often, the protagonist and antagonist will have something in common. In this cast, both characters want peace, but not only do they have different visions of a peaceful future, they have different ideas about the methods. These similarities and differences between your pro-and-antagonists will help you.
The main plot of your story should be rooted in this conflict of desires.

Of course, there will be much more to the story than just your main character and antagonist’s conflict, but that conflict should always have a bearing on the story—like Voldemort and Harry Potter’s conflicting desires shaped the overall narrative arc of the series (and each book) without being the most important part of every scene.

DONE? HEAD ON OVER TO PART II

Was this helpful? Did you make any discoveries? Having trouble? Let me know in the comments!



[1] If you don’t have an antagonist, go listen to Adryn’s villain workshop and come back when you’ve got a little more idea of your bad guy or antagonistic force. Check it out on Pendragon Variety Podcast. This is VERY IMPORTANT.

Writing Racial Diversity in Y.A.

Issue

I'm not surprised the discussion on racial diversity in YA came up (again) this year. Re-addressing the topic, Zoe Mariott wrote this post about it. I also found a few articles here and here addressing the need for not only more non-white characters represented in YA, but for them to be represented diversely within those groups in a non-stereotypical, non-token way, and more often as POV characters.

I find a great deal of the pictures dealing with diversity
either trite or seriously ambiguous. Here, for example.
The message is "Diversity is more than race", but what
I'm seing in the picture are racially-diverse hands.
Either I'm caffeine-deprived, or there's an element
missing like the MORE THAN RACE element.
Let's get personal for a sec: I am clearly a white girl. Not so clearly, I'm also Cherokee, though that has had so little bearing on my life that it's more like a "fun fact about me", ranking slightly higher than my insanely-accurate Gollum impression. I went through obsessions as a kid. I read everything I could about Native Americans, the Holocaust, and Greek Mythology. I immersed myself in the stories of slaves escaping on the underground railroad, and those they left behind. Some time in middle school, I discovered Japan. By the time I had graduated high school, I'd consumed such a vast amount of Japanese media that every other character I created was Japanese, or had some connection to Japan. Then I lived in Japan, and my interest deepened (and cringed, at times) and expanded. It continues to spiral out.

I've never had an issue with not having racial diversity in my stories. In fact, Raven had to tell me that I needed to dial back a bit in HELLHOUND, because it was starting to look like an insurance commercial. This isn't meant as a "bragging" statement, or as a kind of desperate claim against people who might say I'm trying to jump on a bandwagon and seem like I'm not racist. I recognize I'm probably going out on a limb with this post, and what I say is not going to be universally agreed upon. What if the bough breaks...? Well, without a unified consensus anywhere on what's right and who's allowed to talk about diversity, I guess it will break for some people. I'm willing to risk it.

As John Green so eloquently states: "The truth resists simplicity."


Fear

On YAtopia, Sarah Nicholas pointed out the following:

I'm comfortable with all these different cultures, it seems natural to me - especially in a country as diverse as the US. But I do still worry about getting something wrong. I'm doing tremendous amounts of research on cultures, but I fear that I'll make one mistake and be accused of being "ignorant" or "insensitive."


Like Morgan discussed last week with her post on LGBTQ characters in fiction, race seems to be one of those issues that the "straight-white" writers either shy away from because "no one wants to be on the wrong side of a civil rights issue" or dive into with either an open mind (good), or the hammer of PC (baaaad).

Awareness

I never really thought about diversity in my own writing until these posts. Writing characters who aren't "like me" (read: straight white female) seems natural, and very few of my stories or ideas have white-washed (or straight-washed) casts. Those that do have geographical and/or temporal limitations that preclude all but a single phenotype. It's never been an intentional choice on my part, but I feel that, by the very fact that it is unintentional, the characters aren't also being defined by their non-white ethnicity.

HELLHOUND is a good example. The love interest is Korean, and several other supporting characters are non-white. Not every race is represented, and I've still got a higher ratio of white characters to any other race, but I didn't make this cast in order to prove a point. If I were to change one of them just to satisfy a desire to make my book's cast seem diverse, I feel like it would not only be disingenuous, it would also tip me over the edge into "insurance ad" world, where we must include everyone and have equal representation so that we may beat the masses over the head with the hammer of our political correctness (see figure below).

THIS PHOTOGRAPH IS NOT POSED AT ALL!
Look, we even got a Leprechaun (left)!
And the boy on the right is bi-curious!
Sometimes the characters just step out of our subconscious a certain way and there's nothing we writers can do to change it. If we try to force our subconscious to accept something we can't properly imagine or envision, it's never going to come across as believable. Like the doctor who blinks a little too much when handing you a prescription, writers who aren't true to their characters are handing out a pill most people aren't going to be cool with swallowing.

In this interview on the Diversity in YA Fiction website, Holly Black answered the inquiry about how she assembled her diverse casts:

 I wish I could say that it was a conscious decision on my part, but it really wasn’t.  My husband’s not white, both my critique partners for Tithe weren’t straight, and my editor was neither white nor straight, so I think my default was a world full of the people I knew and cared about.

I agree with most of what she says, though I'm actually glad it wasn't a conscious decision. As she points out, the characters that leap to a writer's mind are usually the product of composted experience. When casts populated entirely by white characters leap onto the page, it's probably for exactly the same reason. This could be completely unintentional, or it could be mostly coincidence or location, but--for example--if a white girl that hangs out primarily with other white girls, consumes books and television shows and other media about primarily white girls...her compost heap is probably going to have a hard time producing a non-white character who doesn't wear race like a costume.

Friendship is Magic 
Action

So what can this hypothetical white-bread writer girl do if she wants to break out of that?

Note: it's probably a bad idea to walk up to someone and be like, "Hi. You're black, and I need to diversify my friend-group so I can write books that satisfy the market's need for more books with non-white characters. Will you be my friend?"

Probably not the best criteria for friendship. Like characters, I think friends need to be genuine and not made because one or the other of you has an agenda. I have lots of friends from lots of backgrounds, but I honestly can barely remember how I made friends with all of them. Also, I'm not here to dole out advice on having diverse friends. In fact, that thought sort of horrifies me because it assumes a process. There is no "process" for people.

But I think the first step is to care. As Black said, she populated her world with the people she cares about. Well, maybe this hypothetical writer doesn't have friends or family or close colleagues who are non-white or non-straight. Lucky for her, there are books, blogs, vlogs, and countless other resources where we can learn about people who are different from us. The beauty of books is being able to take a journey without having to pack our bags and go--experiencing new and wonderful things vicariously through the characters. It may not be first hand, but it's still experience. It's still another scoop of coffee-grounds on the compost heap.

At the end of her interview, Black responds to the request for advice with the following:

 I think that we as writers have an obligation to tell the truth about the world — and diverse world is a true world.  I also think that we have to be conscious of which stories are ours to tell, which stories we have points of identification with and which stories we need to do more work if we want tell responsibly.  There is a very well respected workshop on “writing the other,” run by Nisi Shawl and Cynthia Ward; resources exist to bridge those gaps in our knowledge and experience.  We have to be thoughtful, but we have to try.

Is this a commentary on what these
two individuals are seeing (or looking for)
when they look at each other, or are
they trying to get us to take off our
tops, then buy denim and face-paint?
I mean. Either way. Topless face-paint.
Almost can't go wrong.
Experience

After graduating from university, I lived in Japan for three years. Living in Asia is an experience unlike any I had ever imagined, and it opened windows in my head I had never known were there. I learned not only about Japanese culture, but about the influences from China, Korea, and many places they differ. I learned some truly awesome and some truly cringe-worthy things about Japanese culture and mind-set.

I also found out first-hand what it's like to be a racial minority in a society that is not only homogeneous, but also very insular. I learned what it's like to date someone who not only isn't from your culture, but speaks exactly zero of your native language. I learned what it's like to feel isolated because of the assumption I couldn't speak Japanese, or because many people refused to take the time to understand what I was trying to say. I know what it's like to be sought out simply because of my race. I've witnessed what it's like for Raven, a non-Japanese Asian, to get dismissed entirely as neither "Japanese enough" nor "foreign enough". No, I'm not bashing Japan--I miss living there so much sometimes it makes me ill--but with the positive comes a lot of negative, and all of that goes into the compost heap. All of that is experience to draw from.

I also learned that tossing a different set of features at a character is not enough--there's so much that fills that skin, so much history that is grafted into someone's blood. So much that's beautiful and wonderful and weird about a cultural history that is so vastly different from my own.

More importantly, I learned that people don't walk around with these differences constantly pinging around the inside of their skulls. I doubt Raven wakes up every morning and obsessively sweeps the floor, thinking, "I'm obsessively sweeping the floor because I'm Chinese, and that's what we do, because in the motherland we slept on the floor for thousands of years." I'm pretty sure she wakes up every morning and obsessively sweeps the floor thinking, "OMFG, my cat got litter on the floor how did my hair get there this is so disgusting must clean ALL THE THINGS RIGHT NOW."

Just the same, while I was in Tokyo, I didn't think "I'm drinking a lot of coffee right now because I'm a white American, so I went straight from breast-feeding to Folgers." It was more like "I'm so fucking tired right now I could sleep for a year."

If your character's race is not the point of the story, over-emphasis only highlights their race as "other" or "different", like a neon sign above that character's head, blinking off and on with the words "TOKEN OTHER TO MAKE THIS BOOK LOOK DIVERSE".

Costume and Stereotype

Earlier, I mentioned characters that "wear race like a costume". I don't have any examples of this, because when that happens, there are usually other fundamental issues with the book that, combined, result in a swift trip to the nearest wall, but I'm sure most people have encountered this at one time or another. While I think it's perfectly fine to say "I'm going to make my heroine Asian", I think coming from the standpoint of: "I need my character to be cool and different, so I'm going to make her Asian" is using the superficial "other-ness" of ethnicity as a short-cut for making them unique. And that's not okay with me.

I think Holly Black's "points of identification"suggestion is a good guideline. For example, in HELLHOUND I have as the main love interest a Korean guy named Jaesung Park. I'm not Korean, but I've lived in Asia for three years, consumed a lot of Korean media, done quite a bit of research, and have a best friend who can give me perspective on the dynamics of the Asian-American community and what a person like Jaesung, who came to the U.S. at the age of 11, might face. Jaesung has a little bit of Raven, and a little bit of my friend Mac, who lived in Germany for several years before returning home in the 7th grade, and struggling to fit back into a world he no longer belonged (at possibly the most difficult age). Points of identification. Check.

The book isn't from Jaesung's POV, and the parts concerning him aren't about him being Korean, but neither do they shy away from the fact that he is Korean. That has an impact on who he is. Let's look at the stereotypes he follows: he's a neat-freak who does boxing, is an Applied Math Major, and plays Starcraft.

Where the stereotypes fall apart: first off, he recognizes those aspects of himself that are "Korean Poster-Child"-ish. But recognition is not a get-out-of-jail-free pass for an author. Let's go a little deeper. Unlike many (or most) Asian characters in U.S. fiction, Jaesung is not Asian American. He moved to the U.S. at 11, and  after memorizing a bunch of inane facts about the US that most people born here don't even know naturalized at 18 so he didn't have to pay idiotic prices for college tuition.

Martial Arts: Jaesung's parents are separated--which is still extremely unusual in Asian countries--and his rocky relationship with his father, a former boxing champ of Korea's 1980's boxing boom, complicate his relationship to the sport he grew up with, and his own sense of masculine responsibility. Also, the heroine is an ass-kicking girl who not only grew up in a gang of shape-shifting hounds, but also controls magic. A guy's got to have something to keep some hair on his chest. Oh, wait...

Math: His relationship to math is a product of moving to the US at 11, and speaking virtually no English. He'd never particularly cared for math before, but when it was suddenly the only class he was good at? You bet he started to like it more. Even when he caught up to (and surpassed) many of his age group linguistically, math was the subject where he'd become notable, so that's what he stuck with.

Remember that "masculine responsibility" thing I mentioned earlier? Jaesung has a lot of resentment built up for his dad, particularly because his father didn't provide for their family in the way he should have. Though Jaesung is--like his mother--a gifted musician, out of a (possibly misplaced) sense of responsibility, he turns his energy toward something he thinks will help him provide better for his future family, even if he's somewhat mediocre at it. I'm still waffling over having him let go of that a bit by the end.

Till I decide, he will continue to wear his "Dat Asymptote" tee shirt.

So, what first-glance seems like a stereotype develops layers as the reader begins to understand his background and character flaws. Jaesung struggles between who he is and who he thinks people expect him to be, and that struggle extends beyond race--it's a universal concept I think everyone can understand.

The most important parts of Jaesung's character, however, have nothing to do with the fact that he's Korean. He's manic, hilarious, loyal, and takes responsibility for his actions. Though guilt-ridden for parts of the book, it's the fact that he doesn't sit still and do nothing, and that he is willing to throw his own neck on the line to protect the people he cares about which ultimately makes him the person and the character I love.

I really have no excuse for Starcraft.

(More fun facts about Jaesung: is 6'1"; INFJ; has a YouTube channel where he composes background music for other people's lyrics; is terrified of rats; insists on coasters.)

What about representation of interracial couples?
THE OTHER SIDE OF THE ISSUE

White writers are being encouraged to step outside their skin-tones and write characters of other ethnicities, because there is and honest lack of diversity in fiction, but let's focus for a moment on the non-white YA authors. Skrybbi, as I've said, is a teen librarian, so I plumbed her big librarian brain for a couple of names:


An Na - A Step from Heaven
Gene Lee Yang - American-Born Chinese
Sharon Draper - Copper Sun
Isabelle Allende - City of the Beasts
Malinda Lo - Ash, Huntress (Also Lesbian fiction!)
Walter Dean Meyers - Monster, Lockdown
Pam Munoz Ryan - Esperanza Rising

These are all award-winning, multiple book Young Adult authors who write primarily about characters of their own ethnicity/sexual orientation. They write a good deal of the non-white main characters represented in YA, but most of them never write outside their own ethnicity, down to the last character in the book. Of course, they are making up for a huge gap in the market. They are representing the underrepresented characters in Young Adult fiction, and giving their audience characters they can identify with--people who are like them.

Personally, I never worried about whether or not the characters in what I was reading looked like me. The character's interests and struggles and stories were what I was interested in, but then again, I never had to look very far for a character with my exact description. They were everywhere.

But if, as Black states, "we as writers have an obligation to tell the truth about the world — and diverse world is a true world", at what point do we begin to ask minority Y.A. authors to diversify? Is it okay to expect non-minority writers to present diverse and truthful character casts, but give minority writers a free pass on that expectation because their ethnicity is underrepresented in fiction? I don't have an answer for that.

I do have an example from adult fiction, when, in 2006, African American author Millenia Black sued when her publisher insisted she change her all white cast to an all black cast, because her niche was--after a single book--African American. That spawned a huge discussion on constraining authors within a niche. And a lot of people weighed in on the issue. Hint: she's not the only one this happened to. Also, bookstore segregation of books by race is an issue a lot of people are talking about.


And don't even get us started on white-washing book covers. We'll be here a while.

*4/27/2012 update: The Atlantic Wire published a story about the ongoing struggle here.

Guest Post: The Best Way to Write a Trans Character

Around the YA Literary blogosphere, the current buzz is all about YA Authors being asked to straighten gay characters. Publisher's Weekly published an article by two Young Adult authors who, without naming names, revealed that they had been asked (and not just once) to remove a gay character's viewpoint, or at least all reference to his sexuality. Well, the agent stepped forward with a totally different story...You can read about the whole mess here and form your own opinion.


The positive thing about the whole mess is that it started a dialog about LGBTQ characters in fiction with all the right people. Just after responses to this started cropping up, I was hanging out with my friend Morgan--a transsexual woman--and asked her not just what she thought about the notion of "straightwashing" fiction, but of the treatment by authors, agents, editors, etc of LGBTQ (which she refers to under the umbrella-term "trans") characters in general. Also a writer, Morgan agreed to share her thoughts on the matter in a guest post.


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The Best Way To Write A Trans Character

Morgan can be found HERE and HERE
There isn't one.

Gosh, that sounded disappointing. Let me give specificity a whirl, for giggles. There's a lot of discourse (not to mention monocourse and meta soliloquies, when no one is around) going on about how to tackle LGBT characters in fiction. Some say burn any hopes of it, because there's that background radiation of fear that says “bigoted people will use words like 'decency' as a beating stick against me.” Some caution against the flip side, where you slap in FABULOUS characters sitcom-style willy, even nilly, out of a desire to be topically hip. Or hiply topical, it's hard to keep up (or is it down?). Some say your characters should be out and proud. Some say it should be so subtle it's barely there.

This Some person sure gabs, don't they? But I've been massaging my little lesbian transsexual noodle to conjure an answer, and I don't think there is one. We're still at the 1939 stage of the next great lexicon war as we try to excise terms like hermaphrodite, tranny and transvestite. It's still news worthy when a trans character is in a television show, even moreso when they're actually played by a trans person. I would argue that it's too soon for there to be a right way. Every form of media follows its own set of rules, and almost every form of media is transgender-free, or at least trans-lite, which may be low fat but it means the knowledge fat per serving goes with it.

For instance, take trans memoir “Conundrum” by British travel writer Jan Morris. It was written in the 70's when, if you thought bloody no one was trans now, there was practically negative trans mass in the universe in that dark, bygone era. (Can you tell I'm young and cocksure? Vaginasure?) There being a dearth of edumication about L, G, B and T during her personal coming out, Jan writes her story through the lens of a spiritual rebirth rather than through the more recent socio-medical view. So instead of a story about drawing strength from a community, it's more of a story about trusting yourself even when you're a solitary anomaly. It's a radical approach time-locked to that era, and a microcosm of a community that often prefers to stay hidden.

Because a truly globally connected trans community is something only recently realized, “Conundrum” is part of a heritage of stories on gender defiance. After all, transgender isn't just transsexuals, who pursue “transition” through medical or surgical means. There's bigender and trigender, who by choice spend part of their life as a male, another as female, perhaps still another as androgynous or even as a wholly separate personality. There are crossdressers (formerly known as transvestites) who change their dress and behavior for a certain degree of emotional or sexual satisfaction, while still retaining their assigned gender's identity. There are genderqueer people who blend or cast off the window dress (and duds) of both sides of the divide but don't identify either way.

Take the Japanese animation (anime) fairy tale mind screw series, Revolutionary Girl Utena. It's about the titular Utena who longs to become a prince so she can save the princess. She wears an outfit akin to the other males in the series, she kisses the princess to release the Sword of Dios, and she's weakened into a state of submission later in the series when she forces herself to adopt "feminine" traits and roles. Is she trans? Who knows? We didn't have that precise a language back then, so there's no convenient labeling to pin. All we can say is that the show built a foundation on the corpses of subverted gender norms. We can't say that she was male-identified because that hyphenated word didn't really exist, but we can say that the series revolved around a relationship between two women with opposing social roles. And opposing shades of purple hair.

Now look at the “Sofia Lopez” episodes of Nip/Tuck season one. Here we have a transsexual character seeking surgery, and her doctor, Sean (one of the show's leads), coming to grips with his discomfort, and disgust, with people who change genders. Not that Sean has a moral leg to stand on, since he fed the literal legs Silvio stood on to an alligator three episodes before. But in a sympathetic way he releases the bonds of old guard masculinity and comes to terms with his judgmental nature, and by turn the audience learns a little more about what it means to be trans.

Color bomb pretty and fascinatingly cynical show Paradise Kiss ends with lead guy George leaving the lead gal, George's final scene showing him on a boat alongside none other than his trans best friendgirl. It's platonic love that's in the air, as the show suggests that he needs a partner in crime more than a star-crossed love. While this Casablanca-esque ending doesn't teach you much about being trans, it never has transphobic sentiments, either, instead syncing its tone to the character's. She doesn't dwell on it, and the show leaves her alone about it.

Now “Sex Changes,” by the Dresden Dolls off their album Yes, Virginia.... The song can be read as a cautionary tale about your first sexual experience (“sex changes you”), a condemnation of people who change their sex, or the exact opposite: a condemnation of the way people talk about trans people as victims of a sickness. That said, it's a razor line to walk and should only be performed by professionally calloused razor walking feet.

Finally, the American version of Ugly Betty. The first soapy season involves a trans character who is played both as evil and ethical, as shock value and as a nuanced human being. Halfway through the season she announces she's a main character's supposedly dead brother whose come back from beyond the grave to exact corporate revenge. And in the same breath, admits to faking her death just so she could transition without the scrutiny of her family and peers. She has sex at one point in the series, and it's built up as this “ooh, how different” thing, and yet she and her lover never address it. They just admire each other's beauty and don't sweat what sex with her could be viewed as. Instead they sweat the regular, prescribed amount of sex sweat.

Quiz time: which one of those was the right way to write a trans character?

All of them. The thing is, there's no right way at the moment. Any interpretation is going to cheese someone off, because the community is made of a million pie slices of various thicknesses and crust integrity. Now this may be a scary prospect, because who wants to land on the wrong side of a civil rights issue, now or in the retrospect of history? Safer to just pretend trans people don't exist, because that makes everyone happy. But the thing is, for there to be a standard, there has to be a model. Everyone of you who has even imagined writing a trans character are forging that foot path, here and now. Any interpretation not born out of judgment is going to fit one of those models above, or millions of potential others, because the big secret is out. Trans people are as varied, diverse, strange, good, bad, beautiful, manic, womanic, wild and firework-laced as everyone else.

Further Reading: Writing Gay Characters, The Top 25 Gay TV Characters, Writing a Trans Character
(Edit: 6/18/2012): Check out Zoe E. Whitten's post on the topic here: On Writing Trans Characters and YA Fiction.
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You can find more of Morgan's writing at: TRANSLABRYNTH
And her YouTube Channel: Translabrynth on YouTube

Character Flaws - Make them Matter

Character flaws: those deficiencies and limitations we're supposed to give our characters to make them more human and accessible. We know we need them to avoid writing the dreaded Mary Sue, whose only flaw isn't really a flaw, because it never gets her in trouble or changes the course of her story. Seriously, y'all: how am I supposed to believe that clumsiness is negative when its only consequence is tipping her in the arms of Edward Cullen her love-interest?


A few weeks ago, I wrote a post on interpreting conflicting advice in which I discussed a story I had written and how I used a beta-reader's suggestion to root out the real problem in the story. That problem wasn't that the main character didn't have flaws, but that the flaw didn't matter enough to the story for the reader to feel satisfied. It was only really in writing that post that I understood what I had done. Lest I accidentally claim to having more genius than I actually possess, let me assure you that I didn't "get" the connection of flaw to textual evidence of it until I wrote it down. 


Aspiring writers hear all the time that their characters need to have flaws. What we don't hear so often - which is perhaps more the point - is that those flaws have to matter. What's the point of giving your main character a lightning-bolt scar if it doesn't get him recognized when he doesn't want to be, or twinge and burn when he's taking OWLs? So, how do we make the flaws we give our characters matter?


We give them consequences.


The flash-bulbs are going off in my head like two starlets are cat-fighting on my brain's red-carpet. I knew this about flaws already...sort of. All the components were floating around in my head, waiting for me to connect them. (Raven could probably wax awesome here and make a metaphor about molecules and covalent bonds in reference to this kind of discovery, but I'd have to wiki that sucker, and then she'd sneeze on my science-metaphor and knock it off its unstable little legs.)


Epiphany-moment: I can't just give characters flaws for the sake of having them; I have to make their flaws have consequences! The realization found me scrambling through my manuscripts to make sure there was evidence of the flaws I knew my characters had. And, holey-plots, Batman - there are some places I will need to make repercussions, which opens up a lot of new exciting story possibilities. 


The best part about this connection was the realization that I could follow it backwards, rooting through the text for consequences to flaws I hadn't realized were there. 


I knew that Bay was a recalcitrant busybody, but I never realized his itinerant ways stemmed from their own insecurities, from the grudge he holds against the town he grew up in, and the teacher who left him behind. Who knew Arianna was so impulsive, so rebellious, and that her resistance to taking suggestions from anyone she considers beneath her would land her in so much trouble? And Helena - the Magic-weilding Hellhound - I couldn't believe how fast her self confidence vanished when she wasn't kicking bounty-hunter butt. Boy, does that kick her legs right out from under her in regard to her relationship with her roommates. Then there's Procne - deluding herself about her brother's death because she secretly fears being alone.


Srsly. I could be here a while.


Another bonus about flaws with consequences is that they help me with another topic I really struggle with: theme. I rarely start out writing with a theme in mind, and if one manages to emerge from the text, it's watery and unfocused. But if I consider my characters' flaws...


Mark of Flight: Wisdom is not defined by class or appearance.
Hellhound: Overcoming insecurities to find one's humanity.
Beggar's Twin: Acting out of the fear of loneliness ultimately hurts more people.


I can change these into sentences that reflect major themes in my work! "A princess discovers that wisdom is not defined by class or appearance"; "a non-human girl overcomes finds confidence in her own humanity"; "a young woman defeats her fear of loneliness and puts her brother's soul to rest."


Wow. So, apparently my issues in finding the theme of my story had to do with that un-established connection between a flaw, and how it matters to the story.


*cue hard rock hallelujah*


Giving your characters flaws is not enough - they have to somehow impede your character from reaching his or her goal. Even if it's not part of the main plot, it's got to matter enough to the story that the reader can sympathize with overcoming their own drawbacks, even if they're not the same. Because people sympathize best with characters who have accessible flaws, it's important to showcase them by giving consequences to that flaw.


 Does your character have a scar? Have it cause insecurity, and have that insecurity make her angry. Have that anger make her use excessive force to dispatch an iddybiddy-bad-guy and draw the big bad closer. Sometimes it's useful to look at the plot, and tease out a flaw that might already be there, like an archaeologist unearths the skeletons-in-the-closet of ancient kings. Considering last week's post on character journeys, you can probably tell that I really like this "going backwards" method.


Your characters' flaws have to matter, and to matter, they have to have consequences that affect a plot or sub-plot of the story by hampering your character. Whether it's feeling unworthy of the love-interest, or having a fear of heights that keeps him from becoming a dragon-rider, these flaws have to mean something to the story.


What kinds of flaws have you given your characters and how do they show up in your story? Do you think of flaws before you start, or do they rise from the text as you write? How have your own flaws held you back or gotten in your way?


Image by Jeremy Brooks

Character Starting Points - Going Back

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Sometimes I start writing with a great idea of who my character is, sometimes I start with just a name and a purpose. One of the most valuable things the writing process has taught me is that characters don't have to be perfect the first time around. I've talked a bit about my two books, The Mark of Flight and Hellhound, and as I mentioned in my post last week on characters that cry, I had totally different experiences writing Helena and Arianna.

I created Arianna when I was fifteen, and role-played her with my friends Adryn and Merilee in what I suppose you could consider a very early version of the first book's plot--kidnapped princess who gets help from a slave and a mage, and who risks her own life to save the slave when he is recaptured. I think there were dragons, demonic wolves, and lots of convenient way-houses/caves in some of those early RPs. I'm relieved no longer to have the files.

We moved on to other worlds and characters, but something of Arianna's essence stuck with me, her stubbornness and pride, her kindness and idealism, brewing in my head with her sweet, stuttering ex-slave of a love-interest, who inadvertently learns to use Magic. One day in my senior year of High School (when I was eager to write anything that wasn't a college application essay), I started The Mark of Flight. By then, I had a pretty good idea who Arianna was.

Helena, on the other hand, was little more than a name and a goal. I didn't know what she looked like, I didn't know who her family was or her background, and I knew nothing about her personality. I wrote a version of the opening scene as a writing prompt for one of Holly Lisle's mini workshops, and couldn't get it out of my head. The day before NaNoWriMo, I wrote an outline--at that time I was unemployed and feeling a little worse than useless, so I figured if I was going to be a jobless moocher, I might as well be a jobless moocher with a word-count.

Picture by mrhayata
While writing Arianna, I found there was a disconnect between the girl in my head and the girl on the page. It wans't until I was half-way though the book that I figured out why--Arianna was reacting to the plot, not driving it. I had no outline for the story, and I was still too immature as a writer to think about each scene, and how my character could work in it. I hadn't yet learned that scenes should be a collection of character choices given circumstances, not character reactions to circumstances. That shift in perspective happened only when it had to--when I needed Arianna to make the choice of whether to continue home, or to save the boy who had risked his life for her. After that, she drove each scene and started to become the stubborn, proud, kind, strong girl in my head.

Helena was a more active character to write from the beginning, and easier in many ways because she was modern, and had clear priorities. The problem was, I didn't know her. She was gray matter, condensing into something more concrete as my idea for the story expanded, evolved, and delineated specific requirements. By the time I'd gotten to the end...ohh, boy. All the characters were different, but Helena more than anyone. That spiraling mass of gray matter had finally condensed into a star, but her side-winding trail through the first draft of my story left a detritus of obsolete character actions and scenes.

Arianna, on the other hand, had come into her story almost as wise as she left it--definitely not what you want from a fourteen-year-old princess out in the wilds of her own country for the first time.

For both of these characters, I first had to find their ending-points before I could really decide their beginnings. When I was in school, I always wrote my essays straight through, and then pasted my conclusion into the beginning, so that it looked like my meandering path to the point was intentional. Sometimes, I'd even go back and fix the rest of the essay to more concisely reflect that. Thankfully, I'm a more diligent writer than I was a student.

What I discovered for my characters was that, once I knew who they were when they exited the story, I could use that essence of character and take them backwards a few steps, logically, based on what happens in the story. I could decide for them a stage from which to grow, and change, and develop into that character I had finally come to know by the end. In short, I messed with the starting-point of their character-journey to make the road to their destination more poignant and noticeable.

What kind of things do you learn about your characters in a first-draft? How do your characters' personal journeys evolve and change as you write, and from draft-to-draft? Would you/have you made changes to a story because of a character's need to be dynamic?

Characters that Cry

An Artist in Excruciating Pain
(Wisdom of the day: NEVER Tweet the word iPad. You will get spammed into next week, even if you delete the tweets.)

Writing characters that cry is a tricky process. Every time a character of mine starts to get choked up, I ask myself not whether I would cry in that situation (If I wouldn't, there's something wrong), but whether I would want to read about a character who would. Secondary characters can get a lot more leeway than main characters in this regard--just look at how often Hermione bursts into tears, as opposed to Harry, whose life is unquestionably more difficult (ignore the part where he's a boy and therefore biologically not as prone to tears). I know it's really important for a main character to retain the respect of the reader by showing what they're made of.

So why do my characters cry so much in rough drafts?

In The Mark of Flight (MoF), my main character Arianna is a fourteen-year-old princess, who struggles to get home before her kidnapping incites a war. In Hellhound (HH), my MC is Helena--a shape-shifter, who grew up enslaved in a gang-like style of living until she freed herself with magic and started working to stop her ex-master. These two characters have very little in common, even their worlds: Arianna's world is High Fantasy, while Helena is from a contemporary alternate version of the US. If there was one thing I discovered through writing both of them, it was that they sniffled their way to the finish-line.

Pampered Princess or Badass Shapeshifter--it doesn't matter. They both wibbled at every moment of intense feeling. By the time I got to the end of the first drafts, I knew the faucets were leaking enough to daunt even the Mario brothers. 

I thought I knew Arianna pretty well when I started MoF, but no matter how well you know your MC before you start, you always know them much better once you finish. At first I thought it was okay for her to cry, since she was a spoiled princess, but when I finished MoF, I went back and removed almost all of Arianna's tears. I had learned so much about her character that I decided her pride and determination wouldn't let her cry until one key point--when she discovers she has fleas in her hair. Trivial, yes, but it's that triviality in the midst of the seriousness that finally gives her an outlet. It serves at least two other purposes, as well.

Writing Helena was a totally different experience.

As some of my older readers will recall, I came up with HH the day before NaNoWriMo started, based on a scene I did as a writing exercise. I had a strong outline, which I wrote in a day using Holly Lisle's note-carding method, but learning about Helena was "pantsing" all the way. There wasn't time to get to know her before I started writing--I had to get to 50,000 words by December 1st. I knew she was running, she had a secret, and she had a goal. I knew she was out of place, but not why, or how she felt about any of it. As the story progressed, I filled in her background, I learned her reactions. I think I got her right in the last two or three chapters, but she had about 20 breaking points scattered throughout the story.

I've chosen which one I think is the most important, and I'm trashing the rest. For the character I had established by the end of the story, her level of vulnerability at the beginning and middle of the story was way too high. That's what I love about writing, though. I can fix my mistakes, and only my beta-readers will ever know.

And everyone who reads this blog. Dammit.

It can't be productive to write this way, but I wonder if this isn't part of my learning process--to write characters weaker in the first draft, so I can decide their limits, and then go back and revise. Maybe in the next book or five, I'll learn to be a little more conservative with the waterworks, so my main characters don't start reading like Cho Chang.

Are you bothered by characters who cry a lot? Do your characters cry too much in rough drafts, or not enough? What other kinds of rough-draft tendencies do you have?

Scribe's Resources for Fantasy Writers


I often find myself wishing I could remember this awesome resource I found that time when I was seventeen and needed a name for a character in his 30's that sounded French and started with a P but wasn't "Pierre" or "Phillipe" or "Peter", and possibly had a Q in it somewhere, please.

Damn, I miss that resource.

So in order to prevent that from happening again, I've decided to compile a list of the resources I use, or which have been recommended to me. Here it is. Expect additions to this in the future, and feel free to comment and leave links to pages you have found useful! I'll check them out.


PLOT

Possibly the most life-changing writing tool I have ever used, barring only a computer word-processor. This may be designed for plotting with limited time to write...but I think I'm going to use this method for every novel from now on. Seriously, it has helped me to organize and make a coherent story SO MUCH. I've got just over half of the rough draft finished in a month (NaNoWriMo2010 Winner, baby. HOO-rah! (well...huzzah...)).

The University of Michigan's Science Fiction and Fantasy website Dictionary of Symbolism (too legit to quit, guys). Alphabetical by symbol, it's great if you want a quick, one or two-sentence reference of symbols to utilize. I've been using it for HELLHOUND.

CRAFT


Magical Words Blog
LOVE these guys. Not only do they write insightful tips and ruminations on craft, but they're also extremely nice in person. Pendragon Variety went to Stellarcon this year, and had the pleasure of meeting most of them. Really nice people. Really great blog, which has now been published as a book.

Essays by Orson Scott Card on the craft of writing. Almost as addictive as Wikipedia. Almost.

Do I put the period inside or outside the quotation mark? Is it Moses' or Moses's? What the hell is a participle phrase? Commas? Help? This thing is my grammatical bible, and the reason I made such good grades in 12th Grade AP English.

CHARACTERS

I really love this list. I do it with a lot of my characters--even if it may seem tedious and redundant, some of the answers might surprise you. Some of the questions definitely surprised ME. "Why is this character angry?" is a GREAT one, especially for pansy characters. These questions will help create depth.

Fantasy Name Generator This is pretty cool. You can choose from a bunch of different variables and get a list of names to peruse. I found a few good ones, but beware: the Japanese names are strange, even in the (constrained) setting. Only a handful of the ones I saw are usable in the least. You're better off looking up Japanese names on a baby name site.

I really love having a good image for my characters. Sometimes it's in my head...sometimes I need help. Sometimes, I even get inspired by a picture, and end up creating an entire story or character based on it. Check out this site for awesome character art.

Because it's more than dialogue; it's whyalogue.

For those who like to have D&D-esque profiles for all their characters. I haven't used something like this since high school, but I know there are people who find them useful. Here's a ready made one by kittyfelone of Deviant Art. Now...Kitty Felone is a name that is so very Noir it makes me want to write a story. And have her cary an uzi. And possibly a can of tuna.

WORLD-BUILDING

Exactly what it says. These questions are very helpful for getting you thinking about your world in a coherent way.

A very cool, logical way to go about constructing a world that works. Also fun to apply to worlds you already have, just to see where they're not quite cutting it.

Exactly what it says. How big a city does it take to support an inn? The answer to that and many other questions were fairly eye-opening! Go ahead...add some authenticity!

Can my characters drink coffee? Just how early did people start eating crumpets...and what is it anyway? How do I make mead? Find out just about everything you need to know about the introduction of food into the diet (of various cultures!) all over the world, not to mention links to recipes and primary sources! Gotta tell my dad that hot dogs originated in 1487.

A well-organized encyclopedia of different pantheons from Greek to Norse and on and on. Very useful when you don't want to get sucked into Wikipedia for hours (even if you like it. You should be writing).

A guide to different kinds of mythical creatures. If you want some basic information on different creatures, and which creatures around the world are similar (Griffin and Axax, for example), this is a good resource.

MAPPING


Free map-making software. It's designed for RPGs, and I'm currently testing it out to see if it's applicable to non-RPG Medieval fantasy mapping as well. I'll let you know how it turns out.

Originally designed for RPG dungeons, but I find it useful for mapping out rooms and buildings.


LANGUAGE

Seriously. You will create a language. No. Really.

FUN! FUNFUNFUNFUN!!!!!!!! (but I'm a language geek...) Use this to supplement the language clinic above, or the other way around. Using both is very helpful!

BATTLES/WAR/LOGISTICS

Link to the navigation post of this EPICLY good resource for war tactics, battle, logistics, and why women's breastplates don't need boob-bulges. That should be enough for you right there.

Pictures!

Don't be fooled by the simple title. This page will rock your steel (or iron, or bronze, or bone) with historical data, differences, misconceptions, and helpful pictures. Ever wondered "what's the difference between a great sword and a claymore?" "Katana or nodachi?" This is your place to find out.

Check this out. Seriously, it's really really useful for writing period fight scenes without them coming off implausible to members of the SCA and ARMA.



OTHER RESOURCES

Wordle Create fun and pretty word-clouds. It's great for helping you figure out what the theme of your story might be based on which words you happen to use the most often. REALLY fun resource.

OTHER LISTS OF RESOURCES



*Thanks to the folks at the NaNoWriMo Fantasy forum for giving me some of these awesome resources!