Ink-Stained Scribe

Crossing the Fail Road

Last week was a bad week. Some good things happened--Raven and I went to see Wicked with tickets she won at the charity event we both attended earlier this year, and on Wednesday, we hung out with our friend Andrew, who was in town for a book signing (A.J. Hartley, Darwen Arkwright and the Peregrine Pact).

But it was a bad week. Like most bad weeks, it wasn't the product of One Big Thing, but a stew of disappointments, stress, and bad-timing. It left me feeling pretty low, and Friday I finally let it all simmer over as I sat in my car in the parking lot of my local coffee shop, crying, wondering why I was even bothering.

I'm writing this now not because I want encouragement. I'm actually feeling pretty good today. I'm writing this because I'm now on the other side of that feeling, and I wanted to address it.

I reached out for support that day--on Facebook, which is not always the best of forums, but served me well. I didn't want compliments or reassurances, since I have a hard time believing those when I'm in the best of moods, let alone the worst. But I got encouragement. I got support. I got sympathy from others who had been in my shoes. I got the love of my friends.

It's times like that, when the future is uncertain and we realize there's nothing we can do to keep the world from spinning on, that it's good to know we're not alone.

I composed myself, got out of my car, and walked into the coffee-shop. I sat down with my drink, opened my laptop, and pulled up a story.

I started writing.

If there's one thing I've learned about writing, it's this: when I feel bad about my writing, when I feel like I'm never going to get published, or I'm never going to be good enough, or this book that I bled my heart out for is never going to see print, there's  nothing that will make me feel better as quickly as getting back to writing.

When the tsunami hit Japan last March, I wished more than anything that I could be back there, in the country that had been my home for three years, doing something. I felt the need to take all the feelings boiling up inside me and turn them into energy, into action, to do something to get that healing-train moving. I couldn't go to Japan, obviously. I would just be a drain on its much-needed resources. There is no feeling quite so terrible as helplessness.

Back then, I turned to the local university and Japanese community to help in the fund-raising efforts. I performed at a benefit concert, and worked together with my friends to get Adryn home for a few weeks, and out of the upheaval of Japan's post-tsunami climate.

It's doing something, effecting a change in my situation, that makes me feel better when I'm down. So when I feel bad about writing, I write.

This weekend, it really helped. I got another whole scene written on BULLRUSHING THE GHOST, and the story is turning out much more touching than I'd anticipated. It was supposed to be a comedy, but it's now also somewhat romantic.

I'm also blessed with wonderful friends, who push me to be better, who support me without babying me, and who understand that I don't want to be told how great I am when only improving my weaknesses will make me feel better...but still find ways to encourage me despite myself.

Writer Wednesday - What I'm Working On

I got inspired by Darci Cole's post today, where she described the various projects she's working on.

I have a lot of different projects, all at different stages, and I guess it would do me some good to put into words exactly what they are, where I am with all of them, and where I hope to be in the next few months. I'd also like to hear what you guys are working on! Drop me a link to your own blog, or let me know in the comments.

Also, because I have some new followers...


PROJECTS

I have five projects I'm working on right now; this is what they are, and what I'm doing with them.


1. Title: THE MARK OF FLIGHT
When the slave-boy that rescued kidnapped Princess Arianna is once again abducted by slave-traders, Arianna faces a choice: forget the freedom she promised him and rush home to prepare her kingdom for war, or risk her life to free the young man who gave up everything to save her.

Length: Novel (first in THE MARKMASTERS TRILOGY)
Genre: High Fantasy
Status: Completed (on submission)
Description and excerpt HERE.

2. Title: HELLHOUND
Shapeshifting "Hellhound" Helena Martin has only one chance to keep her pack and her human friends safe: make peace with the sorcerers who killed her mother.

Length: Novel (stand-alone)
Genre: Contemporary Fantasy
Status: Draft 2.5
Description and excerpt HERE.

 I did a major plot overhaul during NaNoWriMo 2011, and got a good chunk of it rewritten, but still wasn't totally happy with it. I've finally given up and decided to shift the entire book into first-person. I've got about ten new scenes to write, which will be much easier in first person.

3. THE BEGGAR'S TWIN
In a world where Nobles live in a city above the streets and touching one means death, PROCNE, a street girl with a forbidden magical gift, poses as a male student at the Magicsinger University, vowing to use her chance at power to bring down the society that killed her brother and made her an outcast.
Length: Novel (first in a duology)
Genre: High Fantasy
Status: Detailed Outline
Description HERE.

I have a detailed outline of the first book note-carded, with only a few gaps in the plot that I plan to fill in as I write. The world is very detailed and strong in my mind, but I'm working out a few more specifics with the magic system (since it's based around music). This is the book I took through my Plot Workshop for NaNoWriMo. :)


4. A DIVIDED HEART
A dragon rider pair must make the choice between murdering hatchling dragons, or letting the precious resource fall into enemy hands.

Length: Short Story
Genre: Steampunk (with dragons)
Status: Revision

This story has been through three beta readers, followed by a workshop. I know what needs fixing, and now just need to sit down and hack at the middle, tweaking motivation and intensity, making the characters' relationships clearer and more important

5. BULLRUSHING THE GHOST
"Big Girl" High School junior Georgia wants two things: closure on her one-sided romance with her best friend Hiroki, and an iced vanilla latte. So when their school's priest fails to exorcise the ghost of a tormented AV geek, Caroline agrees to go along with Hiroki's plan to solve the murder...but it wasn't the close encounter she was hoping for.

Length: Long Short Story
Genre: Paranormal...comedy?
Status: Working on first draft

I posted the first page of this short story a few weeks ago. The voice is strong and compelling, I know the subject matter, but my short-story chops are still a bit weak. The major problem I'm having with this story is that I know parts A, C, D, & E. I have no idea what B needs to, well, be. I don't want to lose the voice of this story, so I'm probably just going to power through it and let part B suck.


What are you working on? Where are you in your process with it?

5 Reasons Libraries May Not Buy "50 Shades of Grey"

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Those who are curious about reading the Self Pub phenomenon 50 Shades of Grey may not want to shell out the $$$ for copies of their very own and turn instead to their local libraries. The haven of speed-readers, word gluts, and underfunded book-lovers, most people assume the library would jump on any opportunity to buy a book with so much buzz. Heloooooo, door-count!

They'd be 50 shades of WRONG.

Okay, well, maybe that's exaggerating. Libraries are run on a county-wide basis*, so the decisions are going to be different for every system. While some libraries may, in fact, purchase copies of 50 Shades of Grey, my librarian source provided me with the top five reasons many won't buy into the 50 Shades phenomenon, and they may not be for the reasons you think. Sure, most people are going to assume that librarians are the prudes who keep pasting diapers onto the naked butt and dangly bits of the little boy in the The Night Kitchen, but not so (seriously, that's certain members of the public stapling the pages together, y'all).

A patron walks purposefully up to the front desk, her eyes keen and sharp, her jaw set for a fight. "I want to read 50 Shades of Grey. I didn't realize the library was so prudish. Why aren't you buying it?"
The librarian smiles patiently, thinking of all the Zane novels she's had to read the titles of over the phone. ("You'd like Purple Panties 2? Yes, of course I can hold that for you, sir.") "No ma'am, I'm sorry. We won't be purchasing 50 Shades of Gray. We do have several other books filling that niche, which I'd be happy to direct you to..."
THE TOP FIVE REASONS YOUR LIBRARY MAY NOT BUY 50 SHADES OF GRAY
(And it's not because it's porn.)



1. FLASH IN THE PAN
For all its unexpected commercial success, 50 Shades is, in the words of Tee Morris, nearly "universally panned" online. But the library isn't in the business of buying books for their literary merit (or lack thereof). The library is there to provide the public with books.


Though it began as fanfiction for the Twilight series, there is no indication that, like Twilight, the book will have any staying power in the market. The prose is described as plodding, overly-detailed, and too long. Read React Review states "90% of the traditional romance arc has been completed, and then two more books drag out what, in a romance, would be the last two chapters". And that doesn't bode well for the continued success of books two and three.


 If the library system orders 50 copies of 50 Shades and the rage has died down by this time next year, they'll be stuck with a stack of books that society has lost interest in. Better to wait it out and establish its...endurance. (Yes. I went there.)


(See New York TimesDaily BeastRead React Review for some reviews that are relatively balanced. More Troll-in-the-dungeon reviews can be found at Amazon, & B&N.)

2. LOWFUNDSA (it's not an STD)
SURPRISE! We're in a recession! Like most government organizations, libraries are suffering from a severe lack of funds. Many libraries can't afford to have more than two copies of established bestselling books by established bestselling authors like Stephen King. Committing to 50 Shades of Grey before it's proved to be more than a flash in the pan isn't something a library in such dire straits can afford to do.

And it's not just 50 Shades of Grey. The library system is unable to justify purchasing books that aren't either by bestselling authors or filling a niche. And that's just how it is right now.

Want to help resolve that issue? Donate to your local library. :)

3. NICHE IS FILLED
As readers of erotica already know, the niche for BDSM is by no means empty. The library system already has plenty of erotic fiction by authors with an established fan base, so buying 50 Shades would not fill a need in the library's collection, meaning that particular justification won't stand up long enough to perform. (Yes. I did.)


4. NOT REVIEWED BY A PROFESSIONAL REVIEW SOURCES (yet)
The library buys many of its books based on book reviews provided by Professional Review Sources such as Booklist, and due to 50 Shades of Grey's self-published nature, there are no reviews for the book as of yet. True, a publisher has picked up 50 Shades for release now, so there may eventually be a review available, but as of April 30th, 2012, Booklist has not posted a review.

In order to defend the purchase of a book, especially in times when the library is so strapped for cash (badum tsss), a review from such a professional (as in, the librarian profession) resource is extremely helpful. Without one, librarians may find they have to exercise restraints. I mean. Restraint. Singular.

5. IT'S A TRILOGY
Again, this rule may vary from library to library, but in many systems, if a library purchases the first book in a series, it is then obligated to purchase the rest. Committing to the whole ménage à trois when the series might be a flash in the pan, the library system is underfunded, the niche is already filled, and it's not reviewed by professional sources is an exercise in poor planning, especially given the relatively lukewarm reception of the second and third books in the series.

*Edited to provide some additional linkage:
Florida Today's Article: On Brevard Library pulling 50 Shades from the shelves.
Heroes and Hearbreakers' Article: A response to Florida's Brevard Library pulling the book from the shelves.


And if you haven't seen Ellen's comedy skit about "reading the audiobook for 50 Shades", you must watch it now.




Does your local library have 50 Shades of Grey? Do you think libraries should purchase the book or not? Why? Have you read 50 Shades of Grey? What do you think? 


*Edit: Sometimes. They're sometimes state-run, or privately-owned, or business-owned, or city owned, or...well, you get the idea. Libraries aren't going to be governed by a single, agreed-upon set of rules.

George Lucas - The Phantom Audience


I've been a Star Wars fan since I was a little girl. In middle school, one of my walls was a collage of posters, pictures, and fan-art, I had a one-foot model of the Millenium Falcon suspended from my ceiling, and enough extended universe books to build a desk.

Recently, George Lucas announced that he was stepping back from making feature films because of the negative reaction he continues to receive from fans about alterations he's made to the Star Wars films. The Guardian cited a NY Times interview with Lucas, in which he said the following:

"On the internet, all those same guys that are complaining I made a change are completely changing the movie. I'm saying: 'Fine. But my movie, with my name on it, that says I did it, needs to be the way I want it.'" 
"Why would I make any more," Lucas says, "when everybody yells at you all the time and says what a terrible person you are?"

[Insert appropriate joke about going to the Toshi station to pick up power converters here]

After my initial eye-roll, I had two reactions:
1. Lucas, as the creator, has the power to do whatever he wants with his franchise, but should have been prepared for a negative backlash.
2. Lucas's reaction to audience backlash suggests that he views his audience as witnesses rather than collaborators.
As a creator, I find Lucas's reaction both understandable and problematic. I understand the desire to go back, to tweak things and try to make them more like what you see in your head, but once a work has made an impact on society, the time to make changes has passed.

I'm a firm subscriber to the belief that art belongs to the audience, not the creator. It's is going to be true no matter how much the author wants to control, revise, or retract the original work, because experiencing art is personal, and what we come to understand through that experience weaves itself into our ideas of who we are and where we fit into the world. Both parties come out of it changed, having created the experience inside their heads as something meaningful and indicative of self, even if it's as simple as "Anakin is way more annoying than Luke -- I didn't think that was possible".

While a work of art reflects the audience more than the artist, it is also important not to take the artist entirely out of the equation. Art is the product of the ideas and values of the artist, and an audience resonates with the evidence of those ideas and values, even if their interpretations are completely different. Intention has nothing to do with it. They may want to know what the artist "meant", but only because they have already decided what the work means to them, and want to find out how they compare, and where that places them in the scheme of society/morality/the bright center of the universe.

Whether the intention and interpretation turn out to be the same is irrelevant. For example, no matter how many times Tolkein stated that The Lord of the Rings was not meant as a Christian allegory, the audience member who interprets it that way isn't wrong. He sees the parallels in his own minds, and those parallels become part of the meaning of The Lord of the Rings for him, part of his experience. It has somehow strengthened or created pathways of thinking about the world in relation to something that matters to him.

Respect of an audience's reaction is valuable to an artist as well, because it allows her to grow and reevaluate herself. By deciding whether the interpretation of the audience is or isn't what she intended, an artist can create her own meaning and understanding of self through the reaction.

Unfortunately, Lucas didn't get the chance to visit the Vader-cave on Dagobah for a little self-reflection. In a 2004 interview, he said: 
[T]o me, [the original version of the trilogy] doesn’t really exist anymore. It’s like this is the movie I wanted it to be, and I’m sorry you saw half a completed film and fell in love with it. 
Whoa. Stop the Bantha.

Deriding fans for falling in love with something you created, even if you see it as incomplete, is rude enough to inspire Force-lightning. If there's anything Lucas should try to take back, it's that. Let's pretend the fans shot first.

To claim that the original version of the trilogy no longer exists is to say that this whole collaborative sub-culture built around the works, and the meanings derived from the experience of it, are invalid. To Lucas, the film may have been "half completed", but it was released to the public - with or without his permission - and millions fell in love.

He often claimed to have been disappointed, and yet something kept him going after A New Hope, and I doubt it was the desire to keep producing "half completed" films.

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When John Green wrote Looking for Alaska, I'm sure he was proud of it. Later on, however, he stated that he no longer agreed with what he'd set out to write in that book, particularly because some fans pointed out the unfair treatment of a female character. Rather than going back and making changes, however, Green used that change in philosophy to grow as an artist. He wrote another book -- Paper Towns -- in order to reexamine the parts of Looking for Alaska he no longer agreed with.

And that, in my opinion, is how it should be done.

Once a work of art has moved into the public view, it ceases to belong to the artist because each member of the audience develops his or her own unique version -- it becomes a collaboration. The audience gives the work meaning, rates its significance, and uses it to make more art and more communication and facilitate more development of self. Art doesn't just reflect one or the other, artist or audience -- it's a set of facing mirrors that reflect each other indefinitely.

Rather than treating his audience as collaborators, involved in an ongoing process of development, and allowing the original Star Wars trilogy to remain as it originally was, he treated his audience as witnesses to his inability to move on.

Further reading: Flavorwire's Open Thread on George Lucas.


AND TO PROVE that art inspires collaboration and dialoge and change and art, I've written the following song, using the music of YouTuber gunnarolla, as a tribute to George Lucas.

Two Flash Fictions

So, my friend and fellow writing club member, Elyse, made me write flash fiction stories today. I thought, since I've been caught up in a billion projects recently and haven't had time to write a post, I'd inflict these stories upon you all! They're inspired by randomly-selected song lyrics.

Flash Fiction Piece 1


Xan slid through the dingy crowd packed between the facades of every shop on main street, carefully keeping his face covered by the high collar of his coat. The curious, milling crowd was little more than a forest of feet. Some were shod, others not, but they all scuffed over the mud-veined cobbles, trouser hems and petticoats sucking up the muck as the people in them sucked up the lies of the Benefactor.

Xan had had enough of lies, and his answer to them was in a single word, burning in his mind, on his tongue, from his pen.

Revolution.

It had taken only one word, whispered in the dark of gas-lamps, coded into the articles he wrote to extoll the Benefactor's virtue, to amass an army of bodies. It would take many thousand more to convince them to fight.

Xan made his way to the monument of the City Benefactor and took the watch from his pocket. The chain spilled out in a silky tumble of delicate gold links, tugging lightly on the clip in his waistcoat. He clicked it open, glanced at its backwards-ticking hands, and checked it against the enormous clock-tower casting a knife of shadow over the courtyard. The hands would match up in less than a minute.

The journalist lifted his head then, eyes scanning the crowd he would soon arm with the greatest weapons: words.

(I am an arms dealer/ Fitting you with weapons in the form of words.)

Flash Fiction Piece 2

The fool’s voice was a low, grating crumble of a sound, like the earth around a gravestone. The throne room was cold, soundless but for the minor lullaby he hummed under his breath. The planks were smooth on his bare feet--worn soft as velvet by the many feet dragged to and fro across them every day.

“At your pleasure, my liege,” he mocked, bowing to the throne he knew was empty. “Shall I slit his throat, my liege? Burn his family before his eyes till he begs for blinding, my liege?” He cackled, raising two spidery, knuckley hands to his own face--to the hollow sockets--and prying wide the gaps in his face, tipping forward as though staring at some tortured soul.

He cackled, danced forward with steps too practiced to need counting, and leapt onto the dais, collapsing lazily across the throne. “The king of fools sayeth…” He turned his head, slow as an owl, and stared sightlessly.

“Give him riches, ten stones in measure, and chuck him in the moat.”

(Are you blind when you’re born? Can you see in the dark? / Dare you look at a king? Would you sit on his throne?)

Specific Motivation for Characters

You may be surprised at the changes...
While doing the outlining workshop, a few of the folks tried to pass off "to be happy" as a character motivation. Sorry, folks - no dice.

It's not that "to be happy" isn't a motivation, but it's sort of the quintessential motivation, and that's the problem. When you're setting up what your character wants, it needs to be as specific as possible, because that specificity will help your character seem unique.

"To be happy" is not unique. Just like we can trace all life back to the sun (well, as far as I know), everyone is motivated by the pursuit of happiness. Does your villain want to destroy the world? Why? Because on some level, world-destruction makes that character happy, or at least satisfied.

And satisfied is like happy. For sociopaths.

Anyway.

Motivation needs to be specific, and if it's not, all the cool shit they can do doesn't matter, because we don't know why it's important. A while back, I saw a youtube video about how Disney princesses always have their "motivation establishing song." I can't find that video now, but here are some of the relevant songs:

Belle: I want adventure in the great wide somewhere...







Ariel: I want to be where the people are...



Mulan: When will my reflection show who I am inside...


Snow White: Someday my prince will come...(barf.)


Ignoring the gag-inducing passivity of the Snow White motivation (If you haven't read the "YA Cover Trends" [aka, Dead Girls on Covers] essays over on Rachel Stark's blog, Trac Changes, I command thee go read.)  you can see that all four of these chicks at least know what they want, and we learn that before they have to start fighting to make it happen or, in Snow White's case, before she is rudely taken advantage of by her step mother, and then randomly sexually assaulted by some chump with a white horse and a crown, and then circumstances allow everyone else to make her dream happen.

But how does one go about figuring out a specific motivation for a character?

The way I've decided to define specific motivation is by breaking it down into two parts:

DESIRE + METHOD

Desire is whatever it is your character wants. This should be the thing that pulls them toward the ending, the thing that they want to fight for. For example, the two main characters of HELLHOUND:

Helena: to gain true freedom and peace for herself and her pack.
Jaesung: to take care of the people he cares about (the way his father didn't).

Method is the course of action your character plans, must, or eventually decides to take in order to achieve their goals. To know this, you must know first what is keeping them from achieving their desires. Again, I'm going to use the cast of HELLHOUND as an example.

What stands between desire and:

Helena: Gwydhain is hunting the Hellhounds, the Sorcerers Guild is hunting her, and Jaesung's attention/suspicion puts her in danger of revealing her secret. 
Jaesung: Helena won't tell him what's going on, so he can't protect her from it. He's still in school and doesn't make enough money yet to help resolve his father's debt.
So, what's their course of action, given these obstacles?

Helena: protect the book with the Hellhound creation spell, learn enough magic to defeat Gwydhain, keep her autonomy from the Sorcerers Guild, and keep her true nature hidden from her roommates. 
Jaesung: find out what's going on with Helena so he can support her...and to make sure she's not endangering anyone else he cares about; finish his degree in applied mathematics and get a good job so he can take care of his family financially.

From these pieces of information, we can decide what each character's specific motivation is. For now, I'm just going to pick the most important obstacle.

THIS IS WHAT IT SHOULD LOOK LIKE

Helena: wants to gain true freedom and peace for herself and her pack BY protecting the book with the Hellhound creation spell and learning enough Magic to defeat Gwydhain. 
Jaesung: wants to take care of the people he cares about (the way his father didn't) BY finding out what's going on with Helena so he can support her, or at least make sure she's not endangering anyone else.

CHARACTER wants to achieve DESIRE by taking a COURSE OF ACTION.

I don't think your characters' initial courses of action need to be successful - Helena fails both to protect the book and to learn enough Magic to defeat Gwydhain, and so must come up with an alternate solution. I'm not going to tell you if Jaesung is successful or not. You'll just have to wait and see...

What is your main character's specific motivation? Is their initial course of action successful? What's their next course of action?

Why Flaws and Motivations Matter More

What's that? I can't hear you over my AWESOME!
Have you ever created a character so sublimely kickass you can't believe they somehow rocketed straight from your subconscious?

He's a white-haired elf who doesn't realize he's a half-demon, and comes back to save the undeserving village that ran him off, only to die a slow and painful death (with an epic death-speech that would make Mercutio weep in a fit of jealous awe) to teach us all a lesson in tolerance. Speaking of tolerance, he's gay! With a demon. Isn't he awesome?
No. He's not. Maybe the above description intrigues you, and that's not a bad thing. Most likely, you're rolling your eyes. How do I know? Because I haven't given you a reason to care. It isn't that there's anything wrong with being a soliloquizing half-elf-half-demon still fighting to protect the ones that would have him killed (and getting some action on the side), but as it stands he's boring.

Here's the deal: anyone can heap awesome skills and powers onto a character. Anyone can throw a sad back-story and a tragic ending at a character. Anyone can give their character a controversial trait. (May I add, here, that making a character gay is not a quirk, flaw, or free-pass on making your character unique?) I can't embolden, underline, italicize, and capitalize the following enough: NONE OF THIS MATTERS WITHOUT FLAWS OR MOTIVATION.

Stories aren't about how awesome a character is. It's about the problems--internal and external--those characters overcome, and why they overcome them. Sure, how they overcome those problems is an important aspect of the plot, but it's in the "why" that we readers find a reason to care.

Looking for even more tips on writing? Go check out freelance editor CA Marshall's blog for her special Editing Advent contest - you could win a free 10 page critique from someone who knows what she's talking about.

Writing Romance - What About MY Needs!?

Writing Podcasts seem to have a certain synchronicity for me--when I'm struggling with something in my own writing, I hear it discussed in a podcast soon thereafter. It's not even that I seek out the episodes so much as I work my way though them, and the episode I need just happens to be there. That's happened to me with all three of my favorite writing podcasts: The Dead Robots Society, I Should Be Writing, and Writing Excuses. That's what I hope my own podcast, Pendragon Variety, can do for other aspiring writers.

 The other day, I was listening to the Writing Excuses podcast, and heard something that seemed like common sense, but which I sometimes lose track of when writing romance between two characters. I'm not talking about romance novels (not that there's anything wrong with them). I'm talking about every romance you write, and what keeps it from feeling forced--what draws your characters to each other, by proxy drawing your readers to the relationship: knowing the needs the two characters satisfy for each other.

 In "The Mark of Flight", Shiro and Arianna were pretty simple to figure out. Shiro fills Arianna's need to be seen, appreciated, and loved for who she is and not because she's a princess. Arianna fills Shiro's need to be believed in, and his need to be valued as a person. Funny enough, they satisfy a very similar needs for each other, though they come from completely different backgrounds. Their romance was never really an issue for me, so when I started writing HELLHOUND, I imagined everything would fall perfectly into place.

 Not so. Part of this was my fault in writing without any idea who my characters were, what motivated them, or what they even wanted. But I feel like I should have figured it out by the end of the first draft. Something wasn't quite working--it was totally unbalanced. They went from 0 to 40...then back to 10...then to 80...and then piddled along to the end. It's not because they're not both likable, interesting, developed characters. It's not because there wasn't plenty of attraction on both sides.

I knew that Jaesung was a good influence on Helena...but I couldn't quite figure out what it was about HER that made him stick around. I'm sure you know what I'm talking about when I say that, sometimes, I don't think one protagonist quite has as much to offer as the other. "Because he loves her" might be valid, but sometimes I still want a little more.

What does Bella have to offer Edward (besides the feeling that he's a horrible monster for wanting to eat her all the time)?

What does Ron give to Hermione (besides at least three reasons to cry in every book)?

What is it about Clary that makes Jace willing to brave even the possibility of incest for her? (*squick*)

 Jaesung gives me that problem. When you're a 23-year-old grad student juggling lots of goslings, what's going to draw you to a girl whose most likely background is "drug mule in witness protection"? Okay. Her hot legs. At first. But when shit starts going down, there's got to be something more.

Helena tries to do everything herself. She truly believes she has something that only she can do, and that she's got to do it alone. Unfortunately, her character flaw is in her inability to look past the moment and see consequences. Because she's too afraid to think about a future she thinks is hopeless, she gets herself into a lot of trouble for making decisions that don't seem to have any foresight.

Jaesung, on the other hand, has effectively killed his ability to live in the moment by always thinking about the past, and trying to figure out how to avoid making the same mistakes as his father. He works hard at something at which he's rather mediocre to make sure he can support his mother and his future family, while relegating his passions into the "hobby" box. Of course, he enjoys them...but he's not the type of person who can let himself disappoint people.

Helena never thinks about the future. Jaesung always does. This causes tension in their relationship, to be sure, but it also gives each of them something to contribute to the other. In a way, their flaws when it comes to life in general become their strengths for each other. Helena's lack of foresight gives Jaesung the opportunity to help her find her "light at the end of the tunnel" (Oh hai, theme). Her recklessness forces him to admit what he truly cares about, whether that lets people down or not.

Because I think flaws are so important, I have to make sure they grow, but don't fix each other, because the story isn't about overcoming flaws. Like many good stories, it's about overcoming adversity despite a thousand things that are in the way, including those flaws. Helena will probably never be able to plan ahead the way Jaesung does, and I know he will always feel duty-bound to take care of everyone around him.

She'll drag him out to play in the snow at 4AM. He'll remember anniversaries. She'll remind him to take a break from doing taxes. He'll make sure they get done later. She'll hunt demons for the safety of the world. He'll make sure she doesn't do it alone.

Yeah. They're a good match.

NaNoWriMo Outlining Workshop Part II - Plot, Subplots, & Scenes


DID YOU MISS PART I?

Last post was focused on getting your characters, conflicts, and motivations solid. This post is all about the nitty-gritty plotty-wotty stuff. Before you start, you're going to need some supplies:


  • Note-cards (preferably the lined variety, in several colors)
  • Writing utensils
  • A notebook (if you like to keep brainstorming materials all together)
  • scratch paper (if you need to spread it out)
  • your character/motivation/conflict notes from the last workshop.


THE BIG PICTURE

Using the information you’ve come up with, write a one-sentence description of your story’s main conflict that includes:


MC (Motivation) + conflict + Antagonist (Motivation) + Action + Consequences


Action in this case means the course of action your character must take in order to overcome the conflict. The consequences are, predictably, what will happen if they fail.


Don’t worry--this sentence will suck, and it’s not your back-cover summary; it’s a way to boil down the conflict between your most important characters. It will sound disgustingly vague until later in the process, when we will modify it a bit. You may find that you have to reach into a later part of the story, when your characters have a bit more information to form motivations that are more directly in opposition with the antagonists, to do this part. That's fine! Just make sure that their motivations from the beginning have a bearing on how the story plays out.

Example:
A headstrong princess who wants to be a great queen is kidnapped by a charismatic general who wants to use her against her kingdom, and she must find her way home in time to warn them of approaching war.

If you can actually boil down your character's course of action to a set of choices, the sentence will be a lot stronger. In my case, I'm certain this was the difference in my query letter between getting and not getting a request.


A headstrong princess who wants to be a great queen is kidnapped by a charismatic general who wants to use her against her kingdom, and she must make a choice: break her promise to her rescuer and rush home to prepare her kingdom for war, or risk her life to free the brave slave-boy who gave up everything to save her.

Both of those sentences sort of sound like crap, but you can see where I'm going with this--I know the major conflict between my protagonist, my antagonist, and the issues that she's going to have to resolve in order to get her happily-ever-after. I can keep this in mind as I work through the rest of the story.

SUBPLOTS & BRAINSTORMING

Now that you have the sentence for your main conflict, go back through your characters’ motivations and try to spot desires that might produce conflict. You don’t have to know anything specific yet about how that will translate into scenes, but it’s good to have in mind where characters will have tension with each other.

Once you identify possible conflicts, write down each on its own sheet of paper and start brainstorming. This is a great time to employ mind-maps, spidergraphs, or stream-of-consciousness brainstorming methods. You may find yourself adding characters and desires to the conflict sheet as you brainstorm. I recommend starting with what the characters want, what is getting in their way, and what other characters have desires that conflict or hold them back.

All of these conflicts are potential subplots. Keep them in mind through the next step of the process, especially when you start to get stuck.


NOTE-CARDING

Note-carding is a method I learned from writer and writing teacher Holly Lisle. I've touted this method before, and I highly recommend you visit Lisle's post describing note-carding and learn the method from her, but I will give a brief overview here.

Figure out roughly how long you want your novel to be. This is a fantasy blog, and since most fantasy books are roughly 100,000 words long, we’ll go with that. The average scene is 1,750 words, so divide your projected word count by your scene-length, and you’ll get a rough estimate of the number of scenes you should have in your novel--in this case 57. This isn’t a perfect estimate--just something to get you thinking in the arena of what you’ll need.

Now divvy up your scenes between narrators and start writing down every scene idea that comes to you, and try to distill it into a single sentence.


This was my outline for last year's NaNoWriMo.
You can see my five character motivation cards,
my scene notecards, and the little post-its
with reminders of subplots and exposition info!
Now, I didn't know about the note-carding method when I wrote The Mark of Flight (and it shows), but I used it for HELLHOUND. At first, I decided I wanted to write between two narrators, so I gave 60% of the scenes to Helena (my MC) and 40% to her godfather, Eamon. Well, by about a third of the way through writing, I changed my mind and gave 100% of the scenes to Helena, which resulted in me chucking a bunch of my notecards. The beauty of it was, the notecarding method made it easy to toss those notecards, and fill them back in with the cool new stuff I'd come up with.

Notecarding is the most guilt-free, changeable form of outlining I've yet found. Don’t censor yourself, don’t worry about how a scene might or might not fit. You should end up with something like this:
“On a yacht off the Miami coast, Helena uses the distraction of the sorcerers battle with her master to break the spell holding her pack captive, and then she steals the book the sorcerers are after and escapes by swimming to shore”
It doesn't have to be that set-out. This is the first scene in the new version of the book, so I knew what needed to happen. You may end up with "set-up set-up set-up...and then something happens that I haven't figured out yet." That's fine. The process of note-carding alone might help you figure out what that "something" needs to be. If not, you'll probably come up with some ideas while writing. Make sure you’ve got about 30 notecards before you move on to the next section. If you start having trouble or getting stuck, go back to your characters' motivations and start trying to figure out how best you can get in their way. This part is FUN, but can be somewhat time-consuming, so give yourself the time you think you'll need.


If it helps, a good way to organize your scene-card is:

Setting + MC (Motivation) + Conflict + Course of Action + Cliffhanger or Resolution

You don't have to stick to that at all, but it's a short and sweet kind of way to set up what happens or needs to happen in your scene. I'll write a few more examples below from my NaNoWriMo project from last year, HELLHOUND.

"In the kitchen, Jaesung asks Helena about her fake military school and catches her in her lie, putting their trust in each other on thin ice. As he leaves, she spots the mark of the sorcerer's guild on their doorstep and realizes she's been found, and her roommates could be in danger."
"In Eamon's basement, Helena--enraged at Rodolfo's murder--fights for her right to join the hunt and take revenge, but then Morgan tells her (the enemy) found Rodolfo because of Helena's inability to lay low."
"In the blacked-out house, Helena fights the influence of the magic glyph as she sets wards, and then passes out just as the first spell pings off her protection." 

If you're having trouble at this point, try writing some stream-of-consciousness pages about what you're having trouble with. I've been known to start out entries like this with "I don't have a villain :(" or "What should the MC be doing between plot-points A and Q?"

ON TO PART III

What discoveries have you made while plotting your story? Have you ever done note-carding before? What are some of your preferred methods of creating the scenes for your story? ARE YOU HAVING FUN?

Writing Racial Diversity in Y.A.

Issue

I'm not surprised the discussion on racial diversity in YA came up (again) this year. Re-addressing the topic, Zoe Mariott wrote this post about it. I also found a few articles here and here addressing the need for not only more non-white characters represented in YA, but for them to be represented diversely within those groups in a non-stereotypical, non-token way, and more often as POV characters.

I find a great deal of the pictures dealing with diversity
either trite or seriously ambiguous. Here, for example.
The message is "Diversity is more than race", but what
I'm seing in the picture are racially-diverse hands.
Either I'm caffeine-deprived, or there's an element
missing like the MORE THAN RACE element.
Let's get personal for a sec: I am clearly a white girl. Not so clearly, I'm also Cherokee, though that has had so little bearing on my life that it's more like a "fun fact about me", ranking slightly higher than my insanely-accurate Gollum impression. I went through obsessions as a kid. I read everything I could about Native Americans, the Holocaust, and Greek Mythology. I immersed myself in the stories of slaves escaping on the underground railroad, and those they left behind. Some time in middle school, I discovered Japan. By the time I had graduated high school, I'd consumed such a vast amount of Japanese media that every other character I created was Japanese, or had some connection to Japan. Then I lived in Japan, and my interest deepened (and cringed, at times) and expanded. It continues to spiral out.

I've never had an issue with not having racial diversity in my stories. In fact, Raven had to tell me that I needed to dial back a bit in HELLHOUND, because it was starting to look like an insurance commercial. This isn't meant as a "bragging" statement, or as a kind of desperate claim against people who might say I'm trying to jump on a bandwagon and seem like I'm not racist. I recognize I'm probably going out on a limb with this post, and what I say is not going to be universally agreed upon. What if the bough breaks...? Well, without a unified consensus anywhere on what's right and who's allowed to talk about diversity, I guess it will break for some people. I'm willing to risk it.

As John Green so eloquently states: "The truth resists simplicity."


Fear

On YAtopia, Sarah Nicholas pointed out the following:

I'm comfortable with all these different cultures, it seems natural to me - especially in a country as diverse as the US. But I do still worry about getting something wrong. I'm doing tremendous amounts of research on cultures, but I fear that I'll make one mistake and be accused of being "ignorant" or "insensitive."


Like Morgan discussed last week with her post on LGBTQ characters in fiction, race seems to be one of those issues that the "straight-white" writers either shy away from because "no one wants to be on the wrong side of a civil rights issue" or dive into with either an open mind (good), or the hammer of PC (baaaad).

Awareness

I never really thought about diversity in my own writing until these posts. Writing characters who aren't "like me" (read: straight white female) seems natural, and very few of my stories or ideas have white-washed (or straight-washed) casts. Those that do have geographical and/or temporal limitations that preclude all but a single phenotype. It's never been an intentional choice on my part, but I feel that, by the very fact that it is unintentional, the characters aren't also being defined by their non-white ethnicity.

HELLHOUND is a good example. The love interest is Korean, and several other supporting characters are non-white. Not every race is represented, and I've still got a higher ratio of white characters to any other race, but I didn't make this cast in order to prove a point. If I were to change one of them just to satisfy a desire to make my book's cast seem diverse, I feel like it would not only be disingenuous, it would also tip me over the edge into "insurance ad" world, where we must include everyone and have equal representation so that we may beat the masses over the head with the hammer of our political correctness (see figure below).

THIS PHOTOGRAPH IS NOT POSED AT ALL!
Look, we even got a Leprechaun (left)!
And the boy on the right is bi-curious!
Sometimes the characters just step out of our subconscious a certain way and there's nothing we writers can do to change it. If we try to force our subconscious to accept something we can't properly imagine or envision, it's never going to come across as believable. Like the doctor who blinks a little too much when handing you a prescription, writers who aren't true to their characters are handing out a pill most people aren't going to be cool with swallowing.

In this interview on the Diversity in YA Fiction website, Holly Black answered the inquiry about how she assembled her diverse casts:

 I wish I could say that it was a conscious decision on my part, but it really wasn’t.  My husband’s not white, both my critique partners for Tithe weren’t straight, and my editor was neither white nor straight, so I think my default was a world full of the people I knew and cared about.

I agree with most of what she says, though I'm actually glad it wasn't a conscious decision. As she points out, the characters that leap to a writer's mind are usually the product of composted experience. When casts populated entirely by white characters leap onto the page, it's probably for exactly the same reason. This could be completely unintentional, or it could be mostly coincidence or location, but--for example--if a white girl that hangs out primarily with other white girls, consumes books and television shows and other media about primarily white girls...her compost heap is probably going to have a hard time producing a non-white character who doesn't wear race like a costume.

Friendship is Magic 
Action

So what can this hypothetical white-bread writer girl do if she wants to break out of that?

Note: it's probably a bad idea to walk up to someone and be like, "Hi. You're black, and I need to diversify my friend-group so I can write books that satisfy the market's need for more books with non-white characters. Will you be my friend?"

Probably not the best criteria for friendship. Like characters, I think friends need to be genuine and not made because one or the other of you has an agenda. I have lots of friends from lots of backgrounds, but I honestly can barely remember how I made friends with all of them. Also, I'm not here to dole out advice on having diverse friends. In fact, that thought sort of horrifies me because it assumes a process. There is no "process" for people.

But I think the first step is to care. As Black said, she populated her world with the people she cares about. Well, maybe this hypothetical writer doesn't have friends or family or close colleagues who are non-white or non-straight. Lucky for her, there are books, blogs, vlogs, and countless other resources where we can learn about people who are different from us. The beauty of books is being able to take a journey without having to pack our bags and go--experiencing new and wonderful things vicariously through the characters. It may not be first hand, but it's still experience. It's still another scoop of coffee-grounds on the compost heap.

At the end of her interview, Black responds to the request for advice with the following:

 I think that we as writers have an obligation to tell the truth about the world — and diverse world is a true world.  I also think that we have to be conscious of which stories are ours to tell, which stories we have points of identification with and which stories we need to do more work if we want tell responsibly.  There is a very well respected workshop on “writing the other,” run by Nisi Shawl and Cynthia Ward; resources exist to bridge those gaps in our knowledge and experience.  We have to be thoughtful, but we have to try.

Is this a commentary on what these
two individuals are seeing (or looking for)
when they look at each other, or are
they trying to get us to take off our
tops, then buy denim and face-paint?
I mean. Either way. Topless face-paint.
Almost can't go wrong.
Experience

After graduating from university, I lived in Japan for three years. Living in Asia is an experience unlike any I had ever imagined, and it opened windows in my head I had never known were there. I learned not only about Japanese culture, but about the influences from China, Korea, and many places they differ. I learned some truly awesome and some truly cringe-worthy things about Japanese culture and mind-set.

I also found out first-hand what it's like to be a racial minority in a society that is not only homogeneous, but also very insular. I learned what it's like to date someone who not only isn't from your culture, but speaks exactly zero of your native language. I learned what it's like to feel isolated because of the assumption I couldn't speak Japanese, or because many people refused to take the time to understand what I was trying to say. I know what it's like to be sought out simply because of my race. I've witnessed what it's like for Raven, a non-Japanese Asian, to get dismissed entirely as neither "Japanese enough" nor "foreign enough". No, I'm not bashing Japan--I miss living there so much sometimes it makes me ill--but with the positive comes a lot of negative, and all of that goes into the compost heap. All of that is experience to draw from.

I also learned that tossing a different set of features at a character is not enough--there's so much that fills that skin, so much history that is grafted into someone's blood. So much that's beautiful and wonderful and weird about a cultural history that is so vastly different from my own.

More importantly, I learned that people don't walk around with these differences constantly pinging around the inside of their skulls. I doubt Raven wakes up every morning and obsessively sweeps the floor, thinking, "I'm obsessively sweeping the floor because I'm Chinese, and that's what we do, because in the motherland we slept on the floor for thousands of years." I'm pretty sure she wakes up every morning and obsessively sweeps the floor thinking, "OMFG, my cat got litter on the floor how did my hair get there this is so disgusting must clean ALL THE THINGS RIGHT NOW."

Just the same, while I was in Tokyo, I didn't think "I'm drinking a lot of coffee right now because I'm a white American, so I went straight from breast-feeding to Folgers." It was more like "I'm so fucking tired right now I could sleep for a year."

If your character's race is not the point of the story, over-emphasis only highlights their race as "other" or "different", like a neon sign above that character's head, blinking off and on with the words "TOKEN OTHER TO MAKE THIS BOOK LOOK DIVERSE".

Costume and Stereotype

Earlier, I mentioned characters that "wear race like a costume". I don't have any examples of this, because when that happens, there are usually other fundamental issues with the book that, combined, result in a swift trip to the nearest wall, but I'm sure most people have encountered this at one time or another. While I think it's perfectly fine to say "I'm going to make my heroine Asian", I think coming from the standpoint of: "I need my character to be cool and different, so I'm going to make her Asian" is using the superficial "other-ness" of ethnicity as a short-cut for making them unique. And that's not okay with me.

I think Holly Black's "points of identification"suggestion is a good guideline. For example, in HELLHOUND I have as the main love interest a Korean guy named Jaesung Park. I'm not Korean, but I've lived in Asia for three years, consumed a lot of Korean media, done quite a bit of research, and have a best friend who can give me perspective on the dynamics of the Asian-American community and what a person like Jaesung, who came to the U.S. at the age of 11, might face. Jaesung has a little bit of Raven, and a little bit of my friend Mac, who lived in Germany for several years before returning home in the 7th grade, and struggling to fit back into a world he no longer belonged (at possibly the most difficult age). Points of identification. Check.

The book isn't from Jaesung's POV, and the parts concerning him aren't about him being Korean, but neither do they shy away from the fact that he is Korean. That has an impact on who he is. Let's look at the stereotypes he follows: he's a neat-freak who does boxing, is an Applied Math Major, and plays Starcraft.

Where the stereotypes fall apart: first off, he recognizes those aspects of himself that are "Korean Poster-Child"-ish. But recognition is not a get-out-of-jail-free pass for an author. Let's go a little deeper. Unlike many (or most) Asian characters in U.S. fiction, Jaesung is not Asian American. He moved to the U.S. at 11, and  after memorizing a bunch of inane facts about the US that most people born here don't even know naturalized at 18 so he didn't have to pay idiotic prices for college tuition.

Martial Arts: Jaesung's parents are separated--which is still extremely unusual in Asian countries--and his rocky relationship with his father, a former boxing champ of Korea's 1980's boxing boom, complicate his relationship to the sport he grew up with, and his own sense of masculine responsibility. Also, the heroine is an ass-kicking girl who not only grew up in a gang of shape-shifting hounds, but also controls magic. A guy's got to have something to keep some hair on his chest. Oh, wait...

Math: His relationship to math is a product of moving to the US at 11, and speaking virtually no English. He'd never particularly cared for math before, but when it was suddenly the only class he was good at? You bet he started to like it more. Even when he caught up to (and surpassed) many of his age group linguistically, math was the subject where he'd become notable, so that's what he stuck with.

Remember that "masculine responsibility" thing I mentioned earlier? Jaesung has a lot of resentment built up for his dad, particularly because his father didn't provide for their family in the way he should have. Though Jaesung is--like his mother--a gifted musician, out of a (possibly misplaced) sense of responsibility, he turns his energy toward something he thinks will help him provide better for his future family, even if he's somewhat mediocre at it. I'm still waffling over having him let go of that a bit by the end.

Till I decide, he will continue to wear his "Dat Asymptote" tee shirt.

So, what first-glance seems like a stereotype develops layers as the reader begins to understand his background and character flaws. Jaesung struggles between who he is and who he thinks people expect him to be, and that struggle extends beyond race--it's a universal concept I think everyone can understand.

The most important parts of Jaesung's character, however, have nothing to do with the fact that he's Korean. He's manic, hilarious, loyal, and takes responsibility for his actions. Though guilt-ridden for parts of the book, it's the fact that he doesn't sit still and do nothing, and that he is willing to throw his own neck on the line to protect the people he cares about which ultimately makes him the person and the character I love.

I really have no excuse for Starcraft.

(More fun facts about Jaesung: is 6'1"; INFJ; has a YouTube channel where he composes background music for other people's lyrics; is terrified of rats; insists on coasters.)

What about representation of interracial couples?
THE OTHER SIDE OF THE ISSUE

White writers are being encouraged to step outside their skin-tones and write characters of other ethnicities, because there is and honest lack of diversity in fiction, but let's focus for a moment on the non-white YA authors. Skrybbi, as I've said, is a teen librarian, so I plumbed her big librarian brain for a couple of names:


An Na - A Step from Heaven
Gene Lee Yang - American-Born Chinese
Sharon Draper - Copper Sun
Isabelle Allende - City of the Beasts
Malinda Lo - Ash, Huntress (Also Lesbian fiction!)
Walter Dean Meyers - Monster, Lockdown
Pam Munoz Ryan - Esperanza Rising

These are all award-winning, multiple book Young Adult authors who write primarily about characters of their own ethnicity/sexual orientation. They write a good deal of the non-white main characters represented in YA, but most of them never write outside their own ethnicity, down to the last character in the book. Of course, they are making up for a huge gap in the market. They are representing the underrepresented characters in Young Adult fiction, and giving their audience characters they can identify with--people who are like them.

Personally, I never worried about whether or not the characters in what I was reading looked like me. The character's interests and struggles and stories were what I was interested in, but then again, I never had to look very far for a character with my exact description. They were everywhere.

But if, as Black states, "we as writers have an obligation to tell the truth about the world — and diverse world is a true world", at what point do we begin to ask minority Y.A. authors to diversify? Is it okay to expect non-minority writers to present diverse and truthful character casts, but give minority writers a free pass on that expectation because their ethnicity is underrepresented in fiction? I don't have an answer for that.

I do have an example from adult fiction, when, in 2006, African American author Millenia Black sued when her publisher insisted she change her all white cast to an all black cast, because her niche was--after a single book--African American. That spawned a huge discussion on constraining authors within a niche. And a lot of people weighed in on the issue. Hint: she's not the only one this happened to. Also, bookstore segregation of books by race is an issue a lot of people are talking about.


And don't even get us started on white-washing book covers. We'll be here a while.

*4/27/2012 update: The Atlantic Wire published a story about the ongoing struggle here.